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Hi JN! Good job on these! Your voice is well-suited for these genres – it was approachable, clear and authentic sounding. I liked the energy and enthusiasm and variation in lists on Travelocity, really nice. I think instead of “45 hundred hotels” it should be “45 thousand hotels”, not a big deal for practice. Good word choices to emphasize for State Farm too like RENT vs. OWN. Keep it up!
Mary
Hi Robert, good job! That is a really long list of beef items! 🙂 Because there are so many items, you might try to vary up pitch here and there to keep the listener’s interest, more so than you would typically need to do for a shorter list. I did not mind the background music, was not distracting. Good job!
Mary
Hi all! Here is a recording for narration practice for my upcoming demo. Let me know what you think! Thank you, Mary
Queen Elizabeth II and Prince Philip, who were married for more than 70 years, can boast of the longest-enduring marriage in British royal history. Their love story, which first began when a 13-year-old Elizabeth developed a crush on her older third cousin, has lasted through Elizabeth’s duties as queen, as well as Philip’s need to adjust to life as her consort. Whether dealing with pushy royal courtiers, dynastic name squabbles or press scrutiny and scandal, they’ve managed to remain a united front.
Thanks for the feedback Andrea! I will work on varying the sentences, that makes sense. Thanks again!
Mary
You are welcome! Being more animated is fun! It seems weird at first, but you can push it more than you think.
Mary
Thanks for the feedback Suecat! I had not thought about it sounding more like an ebook, so thank you! I will work on the pace and inflection more, thanks!
Mary
Hi Taylorn, nice! You have a nice smooth tone and it was fitting for this script. Good variation in the lists too! The last word was cut off, you might try not stopping the recoding immediately after you record to make sure all of the recording is caught. I typically leave a second or two in front of and after the recordings to help with that. Good job!
Mary
Hi Twiegers! Nice! The audio sounds very low on my end, I could hear it but it was just lower volume than typical, easy fix. I use Audacity and usually have to use the Normalize effect up to -3 dB and it helps a ton in increasing the overall volume.
Home Slice – good soothing tone. It seemed a little choppy in a couple of spots – “your independent” sounded like “your, independent” (unneeded pause between those 2 words)
Paws Up – This was nice too. Make sure to emphasize both words in the tagline “Paws up’. Those 2 words ran together for me and sounded like “pauseup”. I tend to smash words together too, I have found that just slowing down for the key spots really helps.I agree with Jloz in that your voice would sound really nice in a romance novel, or maybe a Sandals commercial where you are describing a dream vacation on a beach. You have a nice smooth voice, definitely try that!
Mary
Hi Jloz, nice! They were all nice, did not seem out of your comfort zone to me. The pacing was good and you moved it along, which is good for these scripts. Great clarity throughout.
Business travel – I liked this one the best for you – it was clear and direct
Live event cats – Good lists, and I loved the meow at the end! Made me smile
Scotts Surf – Good lists again
Va-Va Voom – I think this could be a little more animated. I am picturing an over-the-top visual add behind it for some reason, I think the tones could be punched up a bit more / vary them up to sound even more exaggerated at key points, especially when discussing how this “isn’t your husband’s shampoo”. Good job!Mary
Hi all! Here is a read for any and all feedback. Working towards my narration demo. Let me know what you think! Thank you! Mary
Shakespeare’s Family Life
Records survive relating to William Shakespeare’s family that offer an understanding of the context of Shakespeare’s early life and the lives of his family members. John Shakespeare married Mary Arden, and together they had eight children. John and Mary lost two daughters as infants, so William became their eldest child. John Shakespeare worked as a glove-maker, but he also became an important figure in the town of Stratford by fulfilling civic positions. His elevated status meant that he was even more likely to have sent his children, including William, to the local grammar school.
