[mkell755]

Hi Christophe, great job! Your voice is direct and authoritative, really good for this script and corporate onboarding. Great clarity and pacing. The lists at the end sounded very natural and differentiated, so you achieved that in my opinion! Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Ashbyman, great work! I liked all 3 of these scripts for you.
Script 1 – really took me away and gave me great visuals – great pacing and I liked your list of lists towards the end, really served to build the excitement about Martinique.
Script 2 – sounded good also!
Script 3 – This was my favorite for you – good enunciation and clarity. Good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi LRenee, great job! Good variation between the 3 scripts.
Script 1 – I think this script needs a little more variation in pitch, like more over the top and with more enthusiasm and energy. Your voice is deep and serious and sounded a little flat for this one.
Script 2 – Really good work! Your voice sounds very well suited for this genre. Good pacing and emphasis on key words throughout
Script 3 – Also really good! It sounded very authentic and believable. Keep it up!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hello all! Here is a do-over recording for any and all feedback. I was trying to keep it flowing and not to pause unnecessarily. Let me know if you think I succeeded and or you hear other things to work on. Thank you!

Mary

Gertrude Käsebier was an American photographer who was known for her images of motherhood and her portraits of Native Americans; her portraits of the Sioux focused more on the expression and individuality of the person than their costumes and customs. She helped establish the Women’s Professional Photographers Association of America and promoted photography as a career for women.

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[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback LRenee! I’ve been working on both pacing and flow, good to hear that it sounds ok. Thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Official81! Really appreciate the nice words! 🙂

Mary

[mkell755]

Well cool! That sounds like something Sam Elliott would do! 🙂

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Robert! I’ll check on the audio levels. I typically have to Normalize it after I record because it has been too quiet in the past, so maybe I am finally getting better at projecting the right amount of volume to begin with. I’ll also work on the unnecessary pauses. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Tim, thanks for the feedback! I will check on those mid-sentence pauses, and getting into character more – thanks again, that’s helpful!

Mary

[mkell755]

Good job Darlene, I like it! Your voice is good for this genre. I think you might try to vary the list of 5 items at the end with varying pitch, they sounded very similar to each other. Other than that it sounds really nice. Good job!

Mary

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