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Hey Y’all!

Uploading some more commercial HW recordings. As always, love and appreciate any and all feedback/comments.

Thanks!
Max

Carnation: Kids can change minds. They can even change the world around us. Packed with protein, plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials. Because today could change everything.

JC Penney: Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more-Save more. Only at JC Penney.

AllState: Truth is, most motorcycle insurance costs about the same. What’s not the same, is the coverage. Now you can get the AllState protection you need for a price you can afford. Talk to an AllState agent today. Are you in good hands?

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Hi Courtney!

I think both reads are good and you have a great “natural” sounding voice!

Pure Barre: Enthusiasm and smile really come through in a good way with this read. The only thing I’d say is at times your pacing could be just a tad slower in order to emphasize or enunciate certain words. ie. first half of the third sentence. Really really good read overall!

In this house: Another really great read! You seem to have found the proper tone and executed it well. I did notice you said “that’s” instead of “it’s” on “It’s why we make the perfect team”. I’m also wondering if the copy is more of a narration piece than commercial. That being said, I’m not sure how much that matters for HW purposes 🙂 Overall, I think you nailed it!

Hope this helps!

-Max

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JustJohn, thanks so much for your thoughtful reply and feedback! I really appreciate you breaking down each one and generally what you said about tailoring the energy of the read for each script.

Thanks!

-Max

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Hey Y’all!

I tried posting earlier but it seems to not have successfully posted, so if this is a repeat, I apologize! If not, here are a few reads for my HW. Any comments, criticisms, notes of any kind are greatly appreciated. Thanks so much!

– Max

AMSTEL:
Hey… if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would actually come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel Light.

HONEST TEA:
Open a bottle of Honest Tea-and discover an honest world. Filled with real brewed organic tea leaves and delicious organic honey.
Or you could just take a look at the label.
Honest Tea. Refreshingly honest.

CRAYOLA:
Crayola Color Wonder Markers color only on special paper. So your kids can express their creativity more often…in more places…with less mess. Crayola Color Wonder. It starts with Crayola.

AMERICAN EXPRESS:
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.

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Hey Y’all!

Hope everyone is having a great Monday! Below are 3 reads for my coaching HW, any feedback, comments, constructive criticism, etc. is greatly appreciated. Thanks!!

DELTA: WHEN WE’RE BORN. WE ARE MORE ALIKE THAN DIFFERENT. BUT SOMEWHERE ALONG THE WAY, WE START TO BELIEVE THE MORE DISTANT WE ARE FROM EACH OTHER….THE MORE DISTANT WE ARE. ITS NOT UNTIL WE VENTURE INTO THE WORLD THAT WE SEE ALL WE SHARE.MAYBE THATS THE POWER OF FLIGHT. DELTA ISN’T JUST FLYING TO BRING US TOGETHER….BUT TO SHOW, WE WERE NEVER THAT FAR PART TO BEGIN WITH.

DULUTH: If your underwear feels like you’re in a vice…get buck n***d. Duluth Trading Buck N***d Underwear…
The most comfortable underwear there is… No pinch… No stink… No sweat… Get a pair…
Only at Duluth Stores…and Duluth Trading dot com

LEGEND: We’re not a four-star restaurant, but we do serve peppercorn-crusted beef tenderloin in a rich port sauce.
We’re not a furniture store, but we do offer an impressive collection of leather recliners. We’re not a luxury hotel, but we do provide valet parking. We’re not an Internet Service Provider, but we do guarantee immediate Internet access. We’re not a movie theater complex, but we do have 56 screens with surround sound. …We’re not what you think….We’re Legend AirlineS

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Thanks so much for your feedback!! Listening again I definitely hear what both of you are saying about Mr. Coffee needing more smile and warmth. I’ll be sure to work on that!

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Hey Y’all!

Below are 2 reads for my 1st session HW. Comments and feedback of any kind would be awesome and super appreciated! Would love to hear what you have to say.

Thank you!
Max

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Hey Y’all!

My name is Max, I’m new here to the forum and relatively new to the world of VO. I pulled some copy from the script library and would love and really appreciate some feedback/constructive criticism if anyone has a minute.

Thanks!

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