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Hi Alexis!
Nice read! The script works well with your voice, with a nice warm delivery. The pacing and tone were good, with clear enunciation, and varied pitch. I think “Great American Chocolate Town” could have a bit more emphasis to it, but that is just a minor thought.
Kathy
Hi Chas!
I agree, your voice does fit the tone of the script. My feedback, to differ from previous tips, is to vary your inflections when you have lists, so it’s not all one tone. For example, when reading: immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings.
I hope this helps.
Kathy
Hi Holly!
I agree with my fellow VO crew as far as feedback with your read. I did catch a micro-pause in the first sentence (between “product that”.)
As for your audio quality, with room noise, I did not hear anything on my end.
Good read!
Kathy
Hi all!
Here is a telephony read from the library. All feedback is welcome!
Kathy
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Hi burdahgirl!
The audio quality sounded good on my end. As for your read, it was great! I don’t have anything to critique. I’d say a script like this one would be ideal on a demo.
Kathy
Thanks for the feedback, burdahgirl! And for the cheerleader “read” tip — I’ll have to try that!
Kathy
I have tried to post this twice, and both times after editing, they disappeared.
I wrote a narration script for a documentary on L.L. Bean. (If the script doesn’t appear right, it’s the forum.)
I have been having trouble connecting to scripts. I try to bring enthusiasm to my reads, and it sounds campy, or a little too over the top. I try to sound natural, and more conversational, and it sounds like I am reading the script. I know smiling, as well as visualizing your audience, are often mentioned. I’m trying. As someone who is a bit of an introvert, and doesn’t socialize too much, I am also here to get out of my shell, too.
Any feedback is appreciated.
Kathy
L.L. Bean
The story of L.L. Bean is ever evolving. But, the outdoors has always been at the heart of it.
After returning from a hunting trip in 1911 with cold, damp feet, Leon Leonwood Bean has a revolutionary idea – and changed footwear forever.
In the next two hours, explore over 100 years of L.L .Bean history.
Welcome back, Mary!
Your pace was good here. I can hear you relaxing more.
The opening line needs a little more of an enthusiastic tone, and in the lists (pursue passions, overcome limitations and realize potential … space, expertise and inspiration), if you varied your inflections with them more, it would improve the read.
I hope this helps. Keep it up! Good read!
Kathy
Hi Burdahgirl!
Great job! Pace, tone, pitch were spot on!
I liked how you added micro-pauses in the line: Easily share your campaign in person via social media or e-mail so your friends and family can help you reach your funding goal no matter where they live. Otherwise, it would be a run-on sentence.
Your last line was louder, however, I think that may have been your intention to billboard and create a tag line? It works, but just a little too loud compared to the rest of the copy.
Kathy
