[katelyndawnvo]

Hi there! Here is a piece I will be working on with my coach for my narration demo. This piece is EXTREMELY important to me and thought I would practice it and post it. I’m really trying to sound more spontaneous and conversational so I have a specific listener in mind and I want to help listeners of this “women’s history” documentary understand how they should FEEL about what they are hearing. Some excitement, some frustration over the limitations women had to live with. ANYWAYS any feedback is appreciated. I hope I”m able to convey what I want to.

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sorry this was meant to go on the last upload I did… not sure how it ended up here and can’t delete lol..

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi Mary! I also feel like the enthusiasm is not there. I’ve yet to hear something from your posts that I feel like “mary is totally into this thing”. I’m wondering just what you are passionate about in life, what gets you excited? Maybe start from there. What do you naturally get pumped about when you’re talking to friends and family? If you are passionate about baking for instance, is there a brand you LOVE and would you talk to your friends about this AMAZING new mixer you got? Or if you are into gardening what makes you the most excited about gardening? When you find an awesome solution in life do you excitedly tell people about it? I think you are not connecting with the copy which is really the crux of voice-over. If you are not genuinely connecting to the copy I don’t think the read will be a good one. Sorry if this is harsh! You’re such a sweet lady. Perhaps if you are a less enthusiastic person and don’t really get “excited” or passionate about things (my husband is kind of that way…) maybe commercial isn’t the best niche for you because you do have to genuinely have a positive point of view about the product. I do know a coach would be able to really nail down where your voice is best suited, or help you learn to connect to the copy. I know I’m throwing a lot out there.

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi Robert, really nice read! I think your voice is a perfect fit for copy like this. I like the second read better for pacing. The only constructive thing would be that last line “That’s how we run.” To me I feel like a throwaway line in the middle of a script and didn’t feel definitive. Perhaps you could make that last line distinctive. Maybe emphasizing the word “that’s” and have a small pause after. “That’s (mini beat) how we run”. Just an idea. It feels like it needs a confident definitive ending.

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi Toque! Nice audio quality and you have a very nice voice. A few notes on the read would be the first line had an uptick in your pitch so it made it sound like a question – “You sent a message to Washington?” I’ve done it too haha! And then I think it is carefully paced so if you note how you are in conversation, when we are in a conversation we don’t pace ourselves so carefully right. I think if you paced this out a bit quicker it may also help that passion and frustration you are supposed to convey come through. Great work though, keep it up! Very exciting that you are working towards a demo.

[katelyndawnvo]

Thank you I appreciate the positive feedback! I have a coaching session today so I will see what my coach mentions about genres and niches my voice fits. I may be over thinking it but I’m so concerned with where to market myself as I don’t want to market myself in an area I don’t fit because that is like just bashing your head into a wall LOL

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi there! I’ve been busy writing different scripts for practicing narration with my coach. Here are 3 reads and I want you to be very honest if my voice does NOT fit a certain style. I’m aware I won’t be doing national geographic because I have a young sound (even though I freaking LOVE DOCUMENTARIES lol) I’m trying to find options where I could fit in documentaries – like female health, or documentaries targeted toward a more female / younger audience. I also love travel and I’m Canadian so I included a read for Banff which I love, and I’m trying for a celebrity biography as well. If you could let me know your thoughts based on what my voice fits that would be great, I really appreciate it, thank you!

Banff – Travelogue
Banff is a stunningly beautiful town high up in Alberta’s Rocky Mountains. Situated within Banff National Park you can enjoy being surrounded by pristine Canadian wilderness including alpine peaks and snow covered forests.

S****l Health Documentary
Hormonal birth control’s main cheat is altering the estrogen and progesterone levels in the body so it thinks you’re already pregnant. So no new eggs are released, the c****x stays plugged up and the uterine lining remains thin.

Celebrity Biography:
Julia Roberts; the star with the megawatt smile has been wowing fans for the past three decades. Eventually winning an Oscar for her role in Erin Brockovich, It’s Julia’s on-screen talent in over 40 films that has earned her a place in the Hollywood pantheon.

Edit: LOL with the words we are not allowed to say

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Hi! These are all really fantastic! I agree that if this is a narration demo the food option feels like a commercial. I would personally avoid putting telephony on a demo as I don’t know if that part of the industry is growing as more and more people are using “automated” human voices. But you may want to research that niche to find out and talk to your coach about that? I think these are awesome and you should definitely include the first 2 on the demo! Nice work!

[katelyndawnvo]

Thank you for taking the time to even count my words/minutes! I totally hear whatt you mean. Thank you for the feedback!

[katelyndawnvo]

I like this read a lot. You’re really good at asking questions in a way that feels authentic which isn’t always easy to do!

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