Grace17
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Hi,
There may not be much of a difference between these takes, but I was speaking to different people in each take. Which do you like better and why? What’s good, and what could be improved? I really appreciate your time giving feedback, thank you very much.Hi,
I would love feedback on what’s great, could be improved, or better about either of these takes. Really appreciate your time! Thank you!You sound friendly and knowledgeable, professional as well. I really like how pleasant and resonant your voice is. Your read is really good! It’s hard to give feedback on it because there’s nothing really “wrong” with it. It sounds like a tour that would be in a museum. I sensed some genuine emotion in the read, but I think it would benefit from displaying more of that genuine emotion and personality. That would really make it “pop” above the competition in an audition I think. Because this narration is a little long (even though it’s just 1 minute, small attention span I guess), I think it’s very important to keep the listener’s attention. It seemed like you were reading a bit predictably, and by sounding more like a machine in some parts, my mind stopped paying as much attention. I would advise inviting more range in tone and genuine emotion to keep the listener’s attention. But regardless, this was a great read!
You have a very nice clear voice, with great enunciation. However, the tones used for these two reads don’t match or make sense with the message so the attitude you gave seemed disconnected from the message to me. So I would say try to integrate the attitude with the words or message, so it’s believable that these are your words.
Your voice sounds really clear with great enunciation. I think you’re getting there with the conversational aspect. I don’t quite feel as an audience member that you’re talking to me. It still has a manufactured sort of robotic tone to it. I advice choosing someone you have a relationship with in real life and REALLY talking to them while still enunciating words well like you do. Practice makes it easier. Forget that you’re recording or putting on a performance and focus on your intent in speaking to your imagined person.
Hi everyone,
I’m practicing presenting different attitudes. I’ll appreciate feedback on the believability and any other technique tips. I was going for motivated without too much excitement in the last audio but it doesn’t seem to me like it came off as very motivated. What do you think? Thanks in advance!note: In this script, there are actions that are meant to be taken in between the phrases so that’s why it probably sounds a bit disjointed. Like I’m supposed to interact with a cashier using my coins checkout app, then leave the coffee with the good news.
In Nike 1 you’re evidently “pushing” for a certain performance. Think of a situation that gives you the attitude you want(think of the face of the person you’re speaking to in that situation). Then, just let it go, be in the moment with the person you’re talking to. It helps me to imagine their reactions to what i’m saying, it’s like multitasking to imagine a person and read the script so it takes practice to do it.
You were pushing less in Nike 2. You uptick the phrases “keep your feet planted firmly on the ground.” and “presses against you” as if you’re asking a question and that hinders the confident and assuring tone of the message in the copy.
Nike 3 was the best of all three with the least pushing and uptick that weakens the confident sound. “It’s Nike” could be said with more confidence. It sounded to me like you were pleading to the audience to buy Nike in the phrase “It’s Nike.” So relax and be confident in what you’re saying.
Nike 1 attitude seems to be on a mission and has a passion about the topic. Nike 2 is more caring in tone. Nike 3 is most confident in what is being said. Though Nike 1 and 3 seem more different in the beginning of their audios but don’t seem that different in tone when you listen to both of them in full. Nike 2 stands out as most different in tone from the other two.
