[drammymammy]

Thank you both for your valuable feedback. I think I was going for “intimate” on the Pampers–imagining images of hospitals, infants, new parents, etc., but I hear how much flatter/low energy it sounds vs. the Tyson! Good point about vocal fry too! Thanks again!

[drammymammy]

Hello!
I’m working on Commercial homework and here is a Diapers and Food and Bev spot. I welcome all feedback, but wanted to state that my home studio is a work-in-progress so these are recorded on my phone. Many thanks!

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[drammymammy]

It sounds very crisp, and I love your accent; it immediately grabbed my attention! In the first sentence, your inflection is higher on the first clause, which makes it sound the most important. Maybe you could try that on the second portion (“so neither have we”) instead to highlight The American Cancer Society. I really like the informative quality of the second sentence–very PSA! Hope you enjoyed your wine. 🙂

[drammymammy]

Wow, you have a great voice and sound! I noticed upward inflection at the end of the phrases “Unique number” and “transaction I make” that I normally associate with asking a question.

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