[Chelle Buffone]

Hey Holly!
EYELINER-I liked your read! My fav part was at the end when you said “if its not broke don’t fix it”. I feel like that part really came through as something you believe. My only note would be to pick up the pacing of the part before and speed up the pace. Way to go! 🙂

HIPPOS-It is cool! never knew that about Hippos! I liked how you played with high and low pitch for this one, it kept me engaged and wanting to keep learning more and I believed you knew what you were talking about. I feel like if you tried to record this again imagining someone(or having someone there) you are talking to/telling this too it would help naturally align the pacing and add an authentic edge to it. Nice work!

[Chelle Buffone]

Hello Edge Community!

I am in the Coaching Program here and have uploaded 2 pieces for creative feedback(no tech; not in professional studio yet) as a part of the learning process. The 1st piece is a “1st Person” commercial I wrote about a dish at a restaurant. The 2nd is a VO for a t-shirt company. As I am just starting out I am open to any thoughts/general notes, but specifically I’d like to know in the 1st piece if you believe my read to be authentically conversational? What changes could make it better?

And for the 2nd piece, same general notes/thoughts request, but also curious if you feel the character and tone match the piece? Did you get a feel for the product? Would you trust this voice? Why or why not?

Thank you so much for your contributions to this journey!

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