[AlexisVO]

Hi all,

I’m looking for feedback on my performance. This was listed as an educational game for kids about space. Thanks! –Alexis

Script:

Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!

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[AlexisVO]

Nice read! I think your pace was good, nice inflection, and the read was very clear. As for audio quality I can’t give good feedback at the moment because I don’t have good headphones (but it sounded ok in my earbuds). –Alexis

[AlexisVO]

Hi Holly, I really liked your read and think that you really got the sense of explaining and educating while being relaxed and conversational. I’m sorry that I can’t comment on the room noise because at the moment I don’t have good headphones (just using earbuds). Nice job!

[AlexisVO]

Hi Chas, I think you did a great job with this script, and I agree with you that your voice is a good match for it.I think your pace was fine, but I think it’s ok to go a little more serious with the tone. I felt at times that you were a little bit upbeat when reading and it seemed out of place. Think about the seriousness of the script – this one ring basically ruined the world – and try to convey that in your read. Keep it up!

[AlexisVO]

Hi, Just looking for feedback on this script from the library. Thanks! Alexis

Script:
Welcome to Hershey, the Great American Chocolate Town, where families come together for a taste of the sweet life. Tucked in the rolling hills of Central Pennsylvania, this idyllic escape offers the latest and greatest in entertainment and hospitality, fused with the traditions of one of America’s original success stories.

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Jonathan, do you know about this? Thanks, Alexis

[AlexisVO]

Thanks for letting me know. Did you see my previous question about email notifications? Thanks

[AlexisVO]

Hi Mary, I think you did a great job with this read. It was clear and you had good pitch variation. I agree with other comments that it could use a little more energy in some places. Imagine that you just ate this for lunch and you’re excited to tell a friend about Freshii and how delicious it is. That could help bring in the feeling to the read.
–Alexis

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Can I upload a profile pic? It would make it easier to find my replies and posts in the forum. I tried to do that on the update profile page but when I click the gray person icon, nothing happens. Thanks.

[AlexisVO]

I guess that can be cool in certain circumstances. Like if you want to explain what you mean but it might be easier to just show the person what you mean by saying it and uploading your comment. For me, that would be rare as I think it’s more convenient and faster to just type a response.

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