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Hey everyone – Two new reads. The GE Medical Systems script is very corporate, though I’m trying not to sound too “drone” like. The Cats read is my attempt at being a little more theatrical om a NatGeo-like tone. All feedback is, of course, most welcome!
Hi Gill,
Thanks, that’s helpful, and I agree. It’s a bit “halting” or choppy and I’m going to take another cut at it. Much appreciated!
Hi Jeff,
I really like this read. Very articulate and clean, and you have a very slight southern accent that adds a really nice “hometown” appeal to the script. You might even try a version that is just a little bit slower to drive the point home even further. Great work!
Hi Rusty,
I really like this read. Most of it feels pretty authentic to me. Even the fact that you left in some pretty audible breaths. I know that, generally, we would edit those out. But I feel like, in this case, you don’t detract from the tone of the read and I’m glad you left them in. Thanks!
Hi KB,
I agree with Grace’s notes above. I also think the NZ-Travel read would benefit from slightly more emotional/enthusiastic vocal expression. Your voice, to me, sounds mature enough for the read. But I would add a little more excitement about NZ as a travel destination. One other thought re. NZ-Travel: Be sure you’re confident in how to pronounce words with which you’re not familiar. The Maori people would generally pronounce the word either as “Mahwri” or “Mahwdi” but never “May-o-ri.” In other words, the “a” should be pronounced like, “Ow!” versus the month of “May.” Hope that makes sense. 🙂
The attached is an excerpt from a corporate annual report script. The intent is to be professional, upbeat, and…well…”corporate,” while remaining as natural as possible. All feedback is welcome – thanks!
Great feedback on my reads! It’s so helpful to hear what listeners think and feel from an objective perspective. This will definitely help me and I look forward to further notes from everyone. Much appreciated!
Todd
