Toque
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Hi all. Commercial practice script (see below). Feedback on anything and everything appreciated. Does my voice suit this kind of commercial? Any other thoughts on what it might be suited for? Thanks. Toque
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Purina One Special Formula for Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.
Great conversational reads again Mary. On the guitar piece, I would try to add some more emotion to it…like the guitar, and the memories of places and songs it has brought you to, are something that you absolutely love and cherish.
Hi Rogue. To my ears, I would agree with you about take #1 sounding better from an audio quality perspective. Of the 4 reads, your delivery/style in read # 3 was the one I liked best. It felt truer to the content, pacing and intention of a piece like that. My only suggestion on that one would be that the pause between “happening” and “above you”, felt a bit extra, especially with there being another pause called for right after “above you”. Great job! Toque
You’ve got a great voice Artyom! I agree with the comments from Mary and Macy. Feels to me like you might need to add a bit more emotion to the read in places, as though the podcast and the things to be discussed in it, are things you’re really interested in and excited to hear about – so you help get the audience excited and interested as well. Toque.
Hi all. Practising a couple of possible short scripts for my commercial demo. Honest feedback on any and all aspects will be greatly appreciated. Thanks! Toque
Script 1 – Old Tomorrow Brewers – “At ‘Old Tomorrow’ brewers, our ‘Double-Up’ Coffee Milk Stout takes a deliciously dark stout and tempers it with cream and coffee flavours. It’s like a beer latte that awakens your senses.
Script 2 – RBC – “From simple saving questions to big financial decisions, we’re here to help. RBC Investments – Get more when you invest with RBC.”
Hi Maci. I echo Mary’s comments. Overall, both quite good reads. The one suggestion I have about the first script is in regards to clearly enunciating the client’s name at the end. I couldn’t quite tell if it was Bench-Mate, Bench-Made, Binge-Made/Mate? Toque
Great job Mary! Your audio quality sounds good to my ears, and your read has gotten much more conversational. Keep up the good work! Toque
Thanks for the feedback Bill, Mary, Tim & Luke! Really appreciate you each taking the time to listen and comment. T
