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Hi all. Demo day is later this month. This isn’t one of the scripts I’ll be using, but I’m just trying to put in some general practice. Would appreciate feedback on any/all aspects. Thanks! Toque

Script:

Hey…if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. You don’t give up a thing. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel light.

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I like it! My only criticism would be that the first “GNC” at the beginning of the read sounded a bit rushed, which can lead to “What did she say?” My coach has been encouraging me (when the company’s name is, or contains, initials) to be a bit more deliberate in articulating each. Toque

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Great reads Caryn! My main note would be that your recording volume feels a tad low, making it a bit difficult to hear. What I could hear sounded pretty great! Toque

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Hi all. Computer crashed last week, so waiting ’til the new one comes in next week. Meanwhile, am practicing using the AVR app on my iphone, so please focus feedback on style, approach to script, execution, is this type of script good for me, etc. Thank you! T.

SCRIPT – Staples work life:

Is work really good? Because it kind of looks bad. Good 
doesn’t make you check your personality at the door. 
Good wants you to bring it to work. Good is hustling 
hard. Not because you have to, but because you’re 
happy to.
Start living the good work life. Staples.

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Thanks Tiffany! Much appreciated. T

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There do feel like quite a few micro-pauses in there. To my ear anyway, it felt like it slowed the read down a bit too much and made it feel choppy. Of course, it depends too on what the read is for – If this is a narration and you’re pausing to wait for something changing on the screen or something like that, then maybe it’s OK? I do love your voice for this…very well suited. Toque

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I thought this was great as well. Can really hear the smile and excitement/anticipation in your voice. Great job! Toque

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I thought this was a good read Robert! Pacing seemed good. Voice and style are well matched to the product. Closing my eyes and not looking at the script, I could understand everything you were saying, so good on enunciation. Toque

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Sounds great Touzet. Well done! Toque

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Hi West. Volume is coming through extremely low, making it hard to hear. Toque

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