svenbot5000
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Hello! I have am trying to get back into the game after a long hiatus so I feel like some practice and feedback is necessary. I did one take of this and would like to know what you notice about it! Just looking for performance feedback, I was not in my usual recording spot so please do not mind any audio issues. Thank you and have a great day!
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Time for a mineral clean, time to RiseWell.Hi everyone! I’m recording my demo later today and I’m super excited and nervous! Here’s a one take warm-up I did, would love any feedback! I’m not in my recording space so please excuse any noise you may hear.
Peet’s Coffee
Meet Marie. She’s a character. She does ballet. Professionally. Because character. That’s what we’re about. Alfred Peet. Now, there was a character. He brought us craft roasted. Us, as in America. You. Me. Diane. Diane’s friend. At Peet’s, we source the best beans. We roast them. We brew them. We make great coffee. We’re Peet’s.
Hi Mary! Looks like you in the first sentence you forgot to say ‘of’. It sounds like you’re just saying ‘mother invention’. I would also play with tone a little bit throughout the read. My coach tells me to treat these like we’re telling a story with a beginning, middle and end. Since you owned an Xterra, think back to how much you liked yours as you’re reading. Hope that helps!
Good afternoon! Here’s another quick recording I did. Please let me know what you think! I’m especially looking for feedback on tone and pace.
Trendi
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Hi everyone! Just doing another quick read for you all. Any feedback is appreciated!
Carnation Breakfast Essentials
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Nice read! I think your voice is perfect for this ad. I would slow down just a tad when you say, “Skip through until you find”, so that the words don’t roll into each other if that makes sense.
Howdy! You’re off to a great start with the first sentence, it’s very inviting and the inflection is good. It goes a little flat when you get to “Tex Mex”, I would jazz it up so it matches with the fun you added to “Salsa Fresca”. I understand where you’re coming from trying to sound conversational while selling something. Great job!
Hello again everyone! I have another quick recording for you guys. I’m trying to recordings with very few takes so that I can identify common criticisms to focus on before my next appointment. I’d love any feedback you have!
Snapple
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I was hoping for a Bill and Ted styled read and you did not disappoint! Since there seems to be a big emphasis on “REALLY” in the script, I think you could hang on that word a little bit longer. Great job!
Howdy ya’ll! Back at it again, I just wanted to read this one because it looked stupid. I’d love any feedback!
Uncle
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