SuperLuke
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Good recording quality. But while listening to the ziploc commercial, I could hear a lot of pauses. And it felt like it was too slow. You may want to work on pacing yourself a little faster, to sound more dynamic for the commercial performance. Make yourself more desirable to your audience.
hope this critique helps
Great job with the Six Flags commercial read. The second recording sounds like you are advertising the hotel resort with your deeper/ lower register. The second performance seemed like it needed more energy and cheer in your voice. I’m hearing your lower register, not bad for the commercial, but you need to sound inviting to the audience to go to the hotel you are advertising.
It’s a good performance. Aside from a few pauses, maybe talking away from the microphone, you did a great job and I could tell that you believed in the product you were advertising. BUt remember, the more high notes you have the more low notes you will need.
Good performance. Don’t feel bad about the enunciation problems you mentioned, we all have them at times.
I agree with Erik B., about when you take a breath before saying something. It slows down the performance and throws off the performance. Just keep practicing and you will do great.
Hi Erik,
Comment: The first performance sounds like a commercial. It also sounds like you are aiming for sounding like an announcer. The second recording sounds like something we would use for the Discovery Channel, very well done! The third recording was good for narrating the biography.
Critique: Although, maybe make your narration voice stretch out and sound different for each recording because the scripts have set different tones, moods, and feels to them. Your voice sounds the same throughout all 3 reads and sets similar tones.You have a good voice for commercials..these recordings are evidence of that. But I think some of the phrases are rushing the pace of the script in the first one. I agree with JustJohn about that. Other than that, good job.
What was the homework assignment from Art about? The first recording flows very nicely, you sound like a nice commercial for Allstate. I heard some ringing or echoey sounds as you say, “Congratulations” for a second or 2. In the second recording, you sound close to the microphone. I also think it needs to sound a little bit different than the Allstate commercial. The third was a good performance about the beavers. But maybe have less of a pause when you say, “the b****r builds its lodge out of trees and sticks”, I heard the b****r (longer pause) builds its…Maybe make it sound consistent; “the b****r builds”
Anyway, I enjoyed hearing your performances. Keep up the good work
In my own opinion, I would ask myself, “What kind of narration demo do I want?” before I pick something to narrate in my demo. Since you picked this one about psoriasis, I’m guessing you want to make a demo that reflects you as a nonfiction narrator for an article that you may find in a medical journal or a documentary.
As far as your performance and recording quality, good job narrating without having to take a breath in between sentences. You were audible and clear. If you are trying to sound like a documentary, you’re on the right path.
