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Hi Nisha, nice! I liked both of your reads, especially Nature’s Recyclers. I could feel the energy in your voice. In Motivation-Meditation, I liked how you varied the tempo, but I think you went a bit too high in pitch after “As you feel scared.” You could take out the pauses before “akin to” and “so far” and maybe you could make the last sentence sound friendlier.
Hi rustylj, I think your voice is great for both pieces, but I feel like you’re a bit too serious in both, especially in Hungary’s Food Scene. Maybe try to add a smile and see if that lightens up the tone a bit? Imagine that you’re talking to a friend and telling them a fun fact about Hungary.
Hi everyone,
I’m working on my narration demo and on accent reduction, aiming for SAE. It would be awesome if you could listen to this piece and tell me what you think my home state is. Any feedback on performance is greatly appreciated as well 🙂
The script is for a short video about beavers.
Thank you!
Lumberjack, surveyor, builder, engineer. It’s all in a day’s work for a b****r. They’ve got the tools and the know-how to create a brand new ecosystem – one log at a time. When they build, everyone shares the reward. A b****r pond is a wildlife magnet. It’s the place to find a mate and raise a family; to hunt; or to fight for survival. In the centre of the action, the engineer keeps the whole thing running. Building a dam, that’s just part of the job. These guys will face down predators, voyage into the unknown, and battle the full force of nature. All to create their little slice of paradise.
Hi JLoz,
I loved your sound! I think they’re all great: good pacing, inflection and variety throughout. I like how you sound different on each of them.
The Va-Va Voom commercial could be a bit more animated, as Mary said. 🙂Hi Ashlee,
You sound great on these! For the Crayola commercial, I would suggest slowing down a bit, especially on the last line (Crayola… It starts with Crayola) and also varying your pitch a little more on the section that starts with “creativity” and ends with “less mess”.
In the second one, I think you should vary the sentences a bit so they don’t all follow the same pattern.Hi Taylorn,
I really liked your voice and tone on this, but I feel that you could slow down just a little bit.Hi Mary,
I got the same impression as Suecat. I would also suggest varying the sentences a bit so they don’t all follow the same pattern.
That being said, you have a great voice for this type of script!Hi Mike,
I liked the tone in the first one and the energy in the third one.
In the second one, I think you should avoid the ending inflections on “entree” and “master”, take out the pause after “entree” and sound a bit more excited up to “master”. You could also use a slightly different pitch for each of the two questions.
Keep up the good work!Hi everyone,
Here are a couple of homework practice scripts. I’m on a narration track and would greatly appreciate your feedback (e.g., tone, pace, connection to script, neutral English).
Thank you!
AMERICAN AIRLINES (in-flight video)
Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We‘ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We‘ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying.
THE LAND OF EGYPT (travelogue)
Egypt has always been a land of mystery and magic. A land different from all others, difficult to understand, apart and alien, yet strangely fascinating. It was the most self-contained of all the countries of the ancient world; it lived its own life, practised its own religion, and made up its own government with hardly any outside interference either from or upon other civilizations.
