[ShellyMadison]

You’ve chosen quite the challenging read vocabulary wise! Your pace is great for this and your tone gives it the gravitas of a professor. Your enunciation, although important, especially for a sample with so much crucial vernacular, is making you sound stilted and robot like. Words like “summarize” and “development”, you’re hitting each of the syllables very hard and often with the same weight, so the word is very clear but unnatural. Seems like a great place to start to familiarize yourself with it, then slowly work in a more conversational and natural affect as you get more comfortable with the material.

[ShellyMadison]

I listened to the first two. I love how bright your tone is. For the Arby’s read, only thing that stood out was “high”. Sounded like a southern lilt crept into it that wouldn’t necessarily be inappropriate for the ad, but contrasted with the rest of your read.

For the Beringer ad, your pace and lower affect are lovely. I can picture the overlay of red wine being poured into a glass. I’d suggest giving more attention to the first time you say “beringer”. It gets lost in the rest of the sentence and being the brand name, and especially being the first time it’s mentioned, it should stand out more

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