[RCampos]

Thanks so much for the helpful notes! I’ll work on the emotion / engagement. Appreciate your feedback.

[RCampos]

Hi All,
I welcome your feedback on my pace in this VO. Recorded on cell phone, so no need for technical notes. Does this sound conversational? Thanks very much for sharing your thoughts.

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[RCampos]

I enjoy this read and you grabbed my interest in someone I knew nothing about!

[RCampos]

I think you are spot on in the delivery for Betterhelp. You capture the tone and the seriousness of the issue. You sound very conversational in all the above. I do think Pillsbury could be a touch more upbeat.

[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
Would love your feedback on my pace and tone in this first VO, recorded on my cell phone.

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[RCampos]

Very nice variety in tone and pitch throughout your read, which keeps the topic interesting. I have just two small critiques: I thought your pause just before “broken in” could be a tiny bit shorter. And, you say a long “a” when you say, “is a good way.” I think it would sound more conversational to use a short “a,” like we usually do in conversation.

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