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Hi Unity,
I think your voice and delivery bring a gravitas and seriousness – which are both essential to this issue. I just have a couple of small notes:
1. At the very beginning, I don’t hear the “s” in “As a parent…”
2. I think you could give more emphasis to “Autism Speaks” and the “Ad Council” at the end, since presumably they’re paying for this ad and want to be clearly identified.
But other than that, nice conversational tone and effective delivery.
If you have a moment, I would greatly appreciate a comment on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57pm. I also have a Cool Jazz VO – posted on 10-25. Thank you!Hi Nikka,
I think you nailed the conversational tone on JIF. Very nice! A few small critiques:
1. At the very top, I think you rushed “My kids” just a touch, so that it gets buried. I think those words could use a little more emphasis.
2. “the” in the three leading brands gets muffled. This might get taken care of with a more sophisticated audio setup, but I do hear you drop your tone on that word, and the first time I listened I wasn’t sure it was a “the”.
3. At the end, JIF Peanut Butter – maybe try going up in intonation rather than down. After your great read, the VO seems to peter out.
Those are all small tweaks. Overall your read sounds very natural and conversational.
I would welcome your feedback on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57 EST. Thank you!Hi there Voice Over Artists!
I would greatly appreciate your feedback on this VO. I don’t have a pro setup yet, so not looking for technical notes, but welcome any and all thoughts. In particular I’m working on my pace and conversational delivery. Thank you!Thanks very much for your note about how I end sentences. I’ll pay more attention to that. All the best!
I like the attitude in this read a lot – it gets my attention. Your clarity and diction is great, but there are a few little spots I’d like to point out. The “x” in complex and the “ss” in boss get a little lost. Maybe your tone is dropping here at the end of the phrase? The only other note I have is that Burts Bees should probably get a bit more oomph, since they’re paying for the spot. I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!
Very nice read of peas and carrots. It sounds like you felt it and I especially like the bit of magic you create at the end with “let your adventure begin.” Just a few minor critiques. You fade a bit at the end and I think instead you should emphasize the last words. The words “games” and “activities” run together for me. I think you could make a tiny pause in between them and also differentiate how they sound. Finally – you emphasize “your” and I don’t think you need to. I think that rhythmically it would sound better to put the emphasis on “account.” I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thanks!
Hi Silver Wit,
I like what you’re doing in version 2, but overall, I prefer version 1 because it’s cleaner and clearer. Version 2 gives me a sense that you’re acting out the headache, and this thought distracts me a bit from your words. I like how you vary the intonation on: throbbing, tension and pain – but I think a more upbeat ending might help. I would appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!Hi Everybody!
I would really appreciate your feedback on this read. I’m working on a conversational read while still honoring the “smooth coolness” of a jazz radio station.Thanks very much for checking out the VO and taking the time to send me some feedback! I actually found an audio clip online of the “Julia” sound and I played that in the background. All the best, R
