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Lots to compliment here: the burst of “free” at the top, the chuckle, and the “hey” – all nice touches that make this very effective. I would suggest a couple of minor tweaks:
An ever so slight pause after: a while right? At the moment, the “well” feels like it comes too soon. You’ve got listener hooked and a little pause can build suspense.
And – “one all weather radial” runs together for me. Just a little differentiation here would help clarify the details of the deal. By the by, I listened to your comments on my AIG VO and made changes – just reloaded today. Would appreciate your take on it. Thanks!Hi Everyone,
I’d welcome your feedback on my second version of this VO: AIG. I’m working on reflecting the tone of the story about people abandoning their homes. Also working on more inflection and on being conversational. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. Best, RobertThanks very much for listening! I’ll work on the phrasing as you suggest. Not exactly what you mean by “roll off” though…
All the best,
RobertI like this read very much. I’ve produced quite a few television specials for Discovery and other channels, and your style, I think, fits many of those shows very well. Here are a couple of notes.
I hear a couple of rapid shifts in your voice, almost like cracks, in the words “day” and “across.” I saw in your notes that you have been working with settings in Audacity. I’m wondering if that has boosted sibilance on these words: grass, some, months, grasslands, abundance. Having said that, you do an excellent job, and I also appreciated your feedback on my AIG VO. If you’re going to be around on the Forum I would welcome your thoughts on my future uploads. Thank you!Thanks very much for sharing your thoughts. You make a good point about ending on an upswing. I’ll work on that – and on adding more inflection. Also good to more carefully reflect the “tough times.” Very helpful feedback and I really appreciate it.
Jack Daniels – love this read – sounds like the real deal! Your tone and style fit the VO so well. You’ve got me hooked with the feel of Lynchburg and the feel of the streets. Just a suggestion, wondering if you could use a very slight pauses after “just as he did” and “don’t ever plan to stop” – something to mimic the leisurely feel of the streets. Same goes for the last few words: “smooth, sippin, Tennessee whiskey.” I feel like these could slow down a tiny tiny bit, to savor the brew.
First State – your mature voice delivers on trust and security, something banks desperately need today! My only critique is that you have a little warble in your voice on the words “everyone” and “rely.” While that folksiness works very well for Jack Daniels, I don’t think you need it for the bank VO.
Great stuff all around. I think both these companies would want to have you do their Vo’s. Best of luck! If you have a moment, I would much appreciate your thoughts on a VO I just uploaded, called AIG. Thanks!Hi Dillon,
You have quite a range, as evidenced by these two very different reads. I like the air of mystery you create in the History VO. You draw us in and make us curious about this underwater wreck. Your hushed tone, while intriguing, sometimes makes picking out some words a bit challenging: “the” bleeds into “German sea” so that I wasn’t sure at first if you said “a German sea” or “the German sea.” Other words that are a little tricky: “rumors,” and “is intrigued.” Perhaps if you brought back a little bit more energy these words will pop out more. You have a fun read with lots of energy in Crayola Color Markers. My only critique on that one is on a couple of words: the “n” in “only” is a little hard to hear, and in the word “creativity” I don’t hear the differentiation between the “e” and the “a.” Nice work. I enjoyed listening to your voice overs. If you have a moment, I would much appreciate your thoughts on a VO I just uploaded, called AIG. Thanks!Hi Anna, Your read is lively, entertaining, and has lots of variation and expression. My only critique is that at times I feel like you’re “punching” more than you might need to – like you’re addressing a classroom rather than an individual. Is this how you would say it to a six-year-old kid who’s sitting next to you on the couch? The word “cars” stands out for me as having a lot of emphasis. But overall, I think your voice and style fit this genre very nicely. Great job. If you have a moment, I would much appreciate your thoughts on a VO I just uploaded, called AIG. Thanks!
RobertHi Voice Over Artists,
I would much appreciate your feedback on this VO. I don’t have a pro setup, so don’t need any technical feedback. I’m mainly working on a conversational delivery, working on a consistent tone while still varying the pitch. I welcome your thoughts.
