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Hi M, Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I appreciate your take on it and welcome your thoughts. I do think I can do better at reflecting the energy and enthusiasm of this particular VO, and I’ll work on the breaths as well. Wishing you all the best, Robert
Thanks very much for your notes, Artist7. I think I’ll try memorizing my next script and see if I can shed the sound of “reading.” My background is in documentaries and news (writing/producing, not voicing), so I think I need to break some old modes and ramp up the enthusiasm when the script calls for it. I will also take another look at the music and see if I can make one piece work throughout. Appreciate your time!
RobertThanks very much, Renita. I’ll work on that. I think I tend to have a laid back California way of speaking. I need to figure out how to bring more energy when it’s needed. Appreciate your thoughts!
RobertHi T Hayes,
Nice job on these. In terms of acting, you show good range here – the VOs call for dramatically different reads and you deliver that well. In Candy – the very beginning sounds like you’re a little further away from the mike. When you get closer, I hear a fuller sound. At :12 I think you could add a bit more emphasis to the title of the program: Making Candy – so that it’s clear this is the name of the show. At :18 it sounds to me like you say “He-you,” instead of “you.” Was that deliberate? In Relaxation, you have an exhale at :02, which seems out of place unless you’re telling people to “breathe out.” I think you effectively capture the meditative tone of this throughout. Very nice work!
RobertHi VO Friends,
I’m very grateful for all the helpful feedback I’ve been getting from you. Here’s a new one. Working on connecting with the material. Would appreciate your thoughts. Thank you!
RobertHi JDM, interesting advice that I had not heard before – thank you! I do think I need to allow for more playfulness and range. Thanks for taking time to listen and comment. I’ll work on these things. All the best…
Hi T Hayes, Thanks very much for your suggestion. I just listened to it again and agree with you. I’ll work on bringing more of the excitement and pace in that section. Appreciate your help.
Hi PamelaB, Nice choice of VO – Little Dancer. Very interesting subject that leaves you wanting to know more. You have a nice, resonant voice, and you articulate clearly. I think you could slow this down and “feel the room” a bit more – really take us in there and make us experience Degas’ bold revelation. At :06 I’m not sure what the word is: this “culture” was exhibited. Is culture, in fact, what you say there? If so, I’m not sure I understand the use of the word, but if that’s the way it’s written, so be it. I think in addition to slowing down, you could give us more variation in pitch, more mystery and more excitement. Good work and wish you all the best in VO. If you have a moment, please listen to my “Back Pain” VO – just posted. Thank you!
RobertHi Artist7,
Just listened to Earthbound-Farm, I like your intonation throughout. You have a nice voice, variety of pitch, and style. I like the way you broaden out the dreaded “pesticides” at the end. Good touch. You have a pause at about :08 after vegetables and before “are,” which I don’t think you need, and another pause at about :23 between “crisp, delicious bite,” and “you can take comfort…” Don’t think that pause helps the VO either. I really like the musicality of your final phrase: Food to live by. Nice work. If you have a moment, I would welcome your thoughts on the Back Pain VO I just posted. Thank you!
RobertHi CMcHugh, I think you capture the spirit of the Rinsewell VO nicely. You have some good variety in your tone, but I do think, for this topic you could bring even more variation in pitch and stronger inflection. Rinsewell might appreciate it if you slowed down and emphasized a little more the first time you say their company name. You have a micro-pause at :06 between “with” and “out.” I get that you want to emphasize this, but I think this would work better if you run the words together and punch the word “out.” Final note – your pronunciation of “toxins” sounds more like “toxens” to me. But those are all small tweaks. Nice work overall! If you have a moment, I would appreciate your thoughts on a VO I just posted: Back pain. Thank you!
Robert
