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Hi Mary,
I really like the sound of your voice! Very relatable and credible. I think that for the Vanguard read, you might want to try speaking more from the point of view of the representative of that company, and also as that representative speaking to someone across the table from you or sitting next to you – it might change how you say things if you’re in that kind of setting. I also noticed glottal stops on the “o” words, like “our” and “on.”
I think perhaps the Westin read ended up being rushed because you were trying to make it flow! I do this too. You’ll be able to make it flow without affecting your pace, which should be a little slower (given the context of this piece), but not too slow, of course! It would be great to hear this one again but with the descriptive words accentuated.
Overall, great job. Looking forward to hearing more from you.
HI RYoung,
Although I liked the music choice, I think it could have been lower volume so that your voice doesn’t need to compete with it. I would suggest to be mindful of your delivery being too announcer-y. I think the overall read needs to settle down just a little, so that it sounds more natural while still sounding assured and credible–your voice is already clear and has gravitas, so that already helps you sound nice and authoritative. The company’s name was slightly rushed in my opinion, and it was strong on the “F” of “FTI” so it made me jump (I had headphones on!). I do enjoy your energy overall. Great job!
Hi artyom123 – Your delivery has a clear, friendly and helpful tone. I think it could sound maybe a little bit more natural. Consider varying the pacing, which is what would happen if you were telling this to a coworker in everyday life (just an example). I would also consider which words you are emphasizing over other words. “Increase” might be a good word to emphasize more, and “under” might be more important to emphasize than “2 minutes.” Nice job, look forward to hearing more from you.
Hi Bil-Bo – your voice has such down-home charm and pluckiness. I think at this point, you might want to experiment with different emotions, taking into account how the advertising folks might want the message to come across…For instance, with the Jeep read, maybe try something that has an aspirational tone or adventurous spirit. Maybe read it as if you were a wilderness guide. I would also be interested in hearing your recordings without music (I’m told that casting folks don’t necessarily like to hear auditions with music). I still end up smiling when I hear your recordings. Good job!
Hi DAYLIGHTVO, I enjoyed both recordings….the Straight Talk script sounded more natural than the NASDAQ. For the NASDAQ, I kind of noticed a bit of a pattern where you would couple together two syllables or words together so that the first word is fast and doesn’t get noticed as much, while the second word is more emphasized. For example, “We-ALL,” “to-PLAY,” “and-FROM,” “a MARKet”. For the Straight Talk script, I liked the energy of it, but you might want to consider emphasizing the words with a little bit more smile, rather than with too much of a staccato/insistent tone. I look forward to hearing more from you!
Hello mrtripo9! You have a very unique voice; I like the deepness and the gravitas quality. I think for this script, the delivery could have been more natural, and one of the ways you could make it more natural is to avoid any inflection patterns such as a sing-songy, up-and down pattern throughout. The emotion is nice and friendly, and you don’t have any major pauses, but you might want to consider bringing in a little bit of pause if it helps to group certain phrases together. Well done!
Hello Fellow VO talent,
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Your voice is very robust, upbeat, and clear! I did notice a slight difference in tone or emotion that you applied to each read, but I still noticed a hint of announcer or sales quality. For instance, when you read the “robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats,” it felt like a description of an array of products, and “state of the art platforms” also ended with a similar inflection. I’m not a coach so hopefully I’m not conflicting with what your coach says, but it seems like for narration, it’s important to see which words are important to emphasize, and focus less on making it sound appealing, so perhaps consider slightly decreasing the “oomph” of the read and settle down into a more factual, person-standing-next-to-you read. If you were actually near the actual beavers in the first read, consider what volume you would need to have without disturbing the animals! I enjoyed all three reads overall, though! Thanks for posting.Hi Don,
Your voice is so nice to listen to. It has a warm, slightly gravelly, down-to-earth feel. Just a couple things I noticed:
The “t” and “d” at the end of certain words may not be distinct enough for the listener (such as in “Amstel LighT,” and “functionally you wanT” in the First Bank read).
You may also want to try different ways of saying the beginning and end of the copy to see if it expresses any other emotions. For instance, in the Amstel Light piece, maybe try a gentle and consoling “Heyy..” or a surly, know-it-all roommate “Hey.” I can tell that you have the ability to bring out the comedy and the flavors of the copy with your voice.
Good stuff overall. Thank you for posting!Hi L.Renee,
Nice reads overall.
For the Va-va-va-voom read, I think you’ll be able to add more energy to it, and really talk to whoever you chose as the listener (your friend, or your salon client) with a bit more sassiness!
For the meditation read, be mindful of the pausing in the middle of sentences, or pausing too long at commas. Even though it’s supposed to be a calming read, the pausing prevents it from flowing as well as it could.
For the anxiety read, be aware of the glottal stops at the start of the sentences (“Oh” and “I am…” and “EVerything…” and “ALways…” ). The announcer tag at the end was free of glottal stops. You can still have that imposing personality in the first part of the read, but without hitting those vowels too much.
