[Mike T]

I liked this a lot. There’s nothing negative jumping out to me, it’s all positive. The only nit-pick would be that at times it feels like the delivery is a little rushed. You’ve got a great voice for this.

[Mike T]

The last two lines of the Harvey Home Theatre spot sounded really good and natural to me. Some of the early lines sounded like they were a little similar though. The script to me looks like it’s broken up into 4 small sections: Joke / Product Description / Joke Callback / Tagline. If you can weave those variations into your delivery, you can tell the story the script is trying to tell better.

You nailed that variation in the McCholesterol’s spot where it starts off announcery (on purpose), transitions to a candid hot-mic situation, then back to announcer voice for the end.

[Mike T]

Really good! The biggest thing that stood out to me was towards the end. I think you’re saying “eyes on the road,” but road sort of sounds like world to me. There also are little mouth noises/clicks that I can hear that distract a bit from the delivery.

But overall, I think this sounds great!

[Mike T]

Hey all! I’m hoping for some feedback on some of the following pieces. It’s been a couple of weeks since I’ve been able to record, and I’m trying to knock some dust off and get back into the swing of things.

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