Mike T
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I like the variety between the two spots! The delivery for both spots felt fast. I think if you can slow the pacing down a bit it will help take these to the next level.
I’ve found the lead-in technique definitely helps me keep things conversational, which I struggle with. There are breathing techniques that would probably be able to help as well. Unfortunately, I haven’t had a chance to research any yet myself, even though I need to. I also get sharp in-breaths at the beginning of some sentences.
Keep working at it!
I’m working on finding and adding an explainer element to my upcoming narration demo. Any feedback would be appreciated! Also, my AC was running during this recording. I normally turn the air off when I record. I’m curious if anyone is able to pick up the sound of the AC and how distracting it ends up being.
I really like the Six Flags spot. I didn’t hear you, I heard the character! The only thing on that spot might be to deliver the final “Yes!” in a way that contrasts more with the no’s from earlier in the script.
It sounds good! Try to have a little more variety in your read. Even though this is only 25 seconds long, it still has a beginning, middle, and end. If you can vary your performance a bit, you can connect to the listener more and better tell the story.
You’ve got a great voice! I think you can work a bit on the delivery. It sounded to me like you were reading instead of performing. The Home Depot spot was the best. It won’t take much to get that one to have a more natural delivery.
The Lego Land spot sounded to me like a radio live read, where the host is reading off a sheet of paper live. That’s not a total negative (I love radio and worked in the industry), but probably not the sound you want on your demo.
Also, watch your breathing. I didn’t notice this in the Home Depot spot, but you had some sharp in-breaths on the Lego Land spot. Some breaths are good, but I think those added to the sensation of it sounding like a radio live read vs a produced commercial.
Keep at it!
Thanks! It’s not your headphones, by the way. I typically aim to keep the peaks at -3db, but here I went with -1db for some reason. Sorry!
Thank you! I’m trying to work on correcting the dips in some words that you mentioned and finding the goldilocks zone for the pacing. I think I naturally speak too fast, so I’m trying to slow down and find the right rhythm.
The first half felt less natural than the delivery of the 2nd half. I have a tendency to do micro-pauses with my reads, and I heard those here. But the delivery from :38 on, starting with “no,” was rock solid. It reminded me of the narrator Scott Brick. I can (and have) spent hours listening to him narrate.
