Michele Martin
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Thank you Stephen! I appreciate you taking the time to provide feedback! My coach had similar comments about my tone needing to change based upon the context – so you have a good ear and instincts :). I’m going to work on that!
Hi everyone,
Submitting a narration read for feedback. I think I am guilty of using uptalk in the middle section talking about “kids who are curious enough to question”. I’m not fixing it because I want to confirm that it is indeed uptalk. Trying to learn to “hear” it when I do it.
Thank you 🙂
MicheleHi All!
Here is my first narration read; Trying to get the hang of it after working on commercial scripts in the past. I’m appreciative of any feedback.(I know I need to better articulate the “P” at the end of “looking up” in the first sentence ;).
Thank you,
MicheleHi A-
I liked the variety for your demo! Nice mix! Regarding the yoga script- When you said, “Visit us today at Alluem Yoga”, I thought that “today” could benefit from just a touch more up-beatness. I thought it was a super read and I know that the subject calls for a calm and relaxing tone, but think that the invite to “visit today” could be read in a just a teeny bit more subtle enthusiasm. Maybe a little bit of a higher note on “today”. Congratulations on working on your demo! It all sounded great! This feedback is of course just my opinion and subjective :).I just listened to Amex and thought you sounded really believable. When you said “and American Express keeps it that way” I wanted to cheer “Yeah!” for privacy. Thought you nailed that line. Your tone seemed very fitting and appropriately authoritative for the serious content.
Seth, I thought this sounded so nice! Only thing I can think of is maybe in the second line, smooth out “the all new Acura” just a smidge. Or are those slight pauses intentional for drama? (I don’t mean where you say, “Luxury. Performance. Etc. I can tell those pauses are right on.) Love your voice and tone: Great for a luxury ad!
Love your sound, Seth. Sounds like a voice I’d hear on a real commercial. My only offering is to pick up the pace just a touch. Sounded super!!
Hi Seth-
Ha- me too. I had to read it again to get the part about the canary and deduced it was a reference to the cat not eating him because he (the cat) had a full belly from the Purina cat food :). Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback!
