michaelflemingvoice
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What up, my dude. Listening to both, here are my recommendations. Take em or leave em 🙂
Sandals: Delivery is too slow. Pick up the pace a bit, and I think you’ll hit the sweet spot with the relaxed feel you’re trying to convey. The line “Because everything else is included” was your best moment on this one. I heard the wry smile coming through. Try to do that throughout.
Harvey Home Theatre: A few good moments on this one. I feel you might be trying too hard to be cool when you end your sentences on this one. Again, speed of delivery. Start is a little slow and then there’s some back and forth. “…he can even operate his…” is the meter and tone you want throughout. If you can match that everywhere, I think we’ve got a winner.
In general, relax. Be aware of how each sentence is ending the same and try to change it up a bit. When I started out, I sounded like I was trying too hard to act. I’m still having to overcome that at times, but the faster you can get your mind around imagining talking to a person and keeping their attention, the better this will click.
Keep up the good work!
Hello! I am currently going through training for my first demo, but I was able to accomplish this: https://blog.podbean.com/podbean-announces-the-finalists-for-the-start-advertising-on-podcasts-contest-for-2022/
If you don’t mind voting for me (or your favorite if it’s not me. No hard feelings here) it would be appreciated. And check out my podcast at the same time. 🙂
Thank you for being an awesome community!
Mike Fleming
I have enjoyed everything I’ve seen you post on here. You got it going on. 2 things:
1) See if you can push through a little more at the end of each phrase. It gets a little too breathy too often.
2) When I say too often, this sounds like a piece of a much longer narration, so the audience will catch on to that speech pattern of the same rise and fall on each phrase and might turn them off. Really play with variation in the read and truly think about where you are pausing and why.I’d hire you , though. In a heartbeat.
Howdy! I would love to hear it again without the pause after “numbers”. I felt the change in tone in “John Jacobson” was right on, and I think not pausing will be very effective. And more smile on the “vote Nadine Ronald for a better economic future” while keeping everything else the same. While your voice sounds young, I think you could be very effective if you keep pursuing training in this.
Yeah, man. I can dig it. The Starbucks was your best one because it felt the most relatable and comfortable. I could tell you were you. In National, I liked every single time you highlighted “back”, but the whatever was after that felt weak. Don’t shy away from “road warriors”. Hit it just as hard. And watch the enunciation a bit (something I struggle with too). Discover LA felt like it could have had more variation and was maybe too serious. I think because each phrase ended downwards in pitch, it felt more like something was wrong than something exciting that I want to be a part of. Love the voice, though. It feels like commercials are your thing!
Hello, sir.
Your voice is definitely friendly! I feel like you’re almost there in nailing the ziplock and amtrack. I’m thinking a little more variation in inflections through each piece would nail it.
For instance: “when it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a ziplock bag”…I see the words ‘this,’ ‘know,’ and ‘ziplock’ like hurdles on the track, and I would raise my entire body each time I said them.
The way you read Cleaner Elections, I felt like I was at the funeral for political ads. Like there was actually no way to change them. Rile up your audience with the first three phrases. Get them on your side with the next two questions. See them in your mind agreeing with you on the adjectives, while you hit each one fairly hard. And make them anticipate the answer to the last question, emphasizing almost every word. See how that might change the read.
On Amtrak, imagine those places in your mind that you agree make America a great and beautiful country to travel. Take it all in in you mind and savor it, maybe even imagine those inspirational cello string instrumentals that run over time lapsed clouds to give the inspirational feel, and that’ll help inform the pace, I think. And slow it down on the phone number, I didn’t get a pen in time! 🙂
Each file was cut off at the end, and I see what you mean about quiet, but it didn’t seem horrible. Like I says, you’re almost there, and you have the talent. Keep up the hard work!
