[M]

lovely voice! My suggestions: color “ONLY” on special paper (not on table, walls etc…)

[M]

very nice. Keep it going/connected with “this is definitely the place for cross country…etc…”
maybe mark breaths on the script so you don’t get bogged down with an unnatural inhale.

[M]

Deluth: great match for your voice: deep, hint of south, confident, outdoorsy with a hint of a “commanding general” to it. Bravo.
Acura: seemed less of a fit but perhaps taking out some of the accent, deepening the tone and slowing down could elevate to a more luxurious level.

[M]

Great job.
RB thoughts: the connection gets lost by “omega 3”and the song-song of “flax seeds” – I was expecting a list after “seeds”. Loved the emphasis on “plump” and “juicy” – two great words to “taste” when you say them.
CJ thoughts: great choices on pace and tone! Wonderful delivery suited for your soothing, yet playful, voice. Really nice work!

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