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I’m working on natural delivery and I’d appreciate some good feedback! Thanks!
Chili’s Big Mouth Burger
Not long ago in a Chili’s restaurant, the server, carrying a big mouth burger to a customer turned a corner
and collided with another server carrying a tray of nachos.
Both customers got more than they expected, because what could have been disastrous turned out delicious.
Tangy tortilla strips, jalepenos, and pesto on a burger grilled to perfection.
Introducing Chili’s new NACHO BIG MOUTH BURGER.
Nachos and burger…on a collision course with destiny.Balducci’s
Can your food market pass a simple taste test?
At Balducci’s, we put taste first.
This spring, we’re loading up our stores with fresh and chef-crafted foods that are simply bursting with flavor.
Like majestic orange wild king salmon, flown in daily.
And specialties like champagne ham, slow-smoked over hickory chips and glazed with pineapple juice and brown sugar.
Now there’s a store that puts taste first.
Balducci’s.
The food lover’s market.Sounds good! You have a good calming, relaxing voice.
On the Freshii reading, you might want to slow down a bit and pronounce each word clearly, ESPECIALLY the word Freshii (the money word). Also, be sure to have good variation in your pitch in the middle of sentences. And when you pause, let your words naturally end, but don’t cut them off too soon. Do that, and your reading will be just that much better! Good work!
Your Amstel Light reading was really good! Sounds like it came from an official commercial. Creative variation in pitch, great accent, not too fast, but not slow either. Great job! Keep it up!
Hi! I’m working on sounding natural in my delivery. Hope you all can help me out!
Atlanta Bread Company
When you think of Atlanta Bread Company,
don’t just think ‘bread’. Think of an entire breakfast menu
– fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees.
Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads.
And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting!
Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.Special K Red Berries
Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea.
Putting them in the box was.
With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good.
Special K Red Berries.A1 Steak Sauce
With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.Thanks for the feedback! It can be challenging to sound natural. I’ll try to implement your tips you gave. I appreciate your advice!
Wow. You transitioned to each different commercial really smoothly. For a second, I thought they were part of the same commercial! Good job! As for your voice, you did good at transitioning your tone between the different moods of each commercial. That’s valuable. Good work!
Great job! Your narration is really good. Your Met Art Tour reading sounds like it could come from a museum commercial! The Cosmic Kids demo sounded good, I would just say that when you say “Yoga, Stories, and Fun!”, you might want to shorten your pauses between each word. As for the Breast Cancer segment, I’d say to slow down a smidgen when it comes to the long, scientific words, so people are sure to understand what the word is. Overall, great work! Hope this helps!
Hey everyone! I’m practicing my conversational delivery, and I was wondering if you guys would listen and see what I could improve. Thanks!
Butterball
Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day.
Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth
of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball
turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple.
HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.Popeye’s
Got a cravin’ for Cajun?
Come along for some New Orleans style fried chicken,
cajun battered fries, and buttermilk biscuits.
Love that chicken at Popeye’s.Sounds great! Everything was pronounced clearly, and you had a good amount of variation in your emphasis and a nice volume (not too quiet, and not too loud). The tempo does seem a little slow sometimes, so you might want to speak just that little more quickly (unless your monologue goes with images and video, possibly) Good work!
I just had my first Private Coaching Demo last week, and I’ve recorded myself reading some scripts. I’d appreciate if you all would take a listen. Thanks!
Comlongon Castle Script
Steeped in Scottish Border history, Comlongon Castle
is more than just a Scottish Wedding Castle venue — it
has fantastic displays of Armor, weapons and banners,
while the opulent bedrooms boast 4-poster beds and jacuzzis,
providing a stunning blend of Medieval and modern luxury.Roll20 Mobile App Script
We want you to be able to keep your characters, in your pocket.
And that all starts here. Roll20 is excited to announce the invite beta
for our new mobile app! You’ve been asking, and now we’re reaching out
to our awesome community to help us build the best mobile VTT experience!Ripple Foods Script
This is Ripple! It’s Dairy Free done right.
It’s plant-based for the great taste! 8 times more protein
than almond milk, and 15 percent more calcium than dairy milk!
When you want more in every pour, all you need is Ripple!
It’s Dairy-Free done right!
