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I need some feedback before another coaching session, specifically about Micropauses and Glottal Stops, as well as not reading too fast. Just need to work that stuff out. Thanks!
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Special K Red Berries.I’m working on my natural delivery. Do these reads sound ‘fake’? Do they have a good pitch variation? Thanks!
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With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.I agree with Slemay on varying the pitch on repeated phrases like ‘who would you be’. Also, the phrase ‘how would you live’ was spoken with an emphasis that didn’t quite have the right tone to it. Otherwise, the overall tone of the read was delivered nicely, and your voice compliments it well! Keep it up!
I’d appreciate some feedback on my natural delivery. Which read sounds more natural? Which one fits best?
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Can your food market pass a simple taste test?
At Balducci’s, we put taste first.
This spring, we’re loading up our stores with fresh and chef-crafted foods that are simply bursting with flavor.
Like majestic orange wild king salmon, flown in daily.
And specialties like champagne ham, slow-smoked over hickory chips and glazed with pineapple juice and brown sugar.
Now there’s a store that puts taste first.
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The food lover’s market.I’ve been working on my natural delivery. Which one of these takes sounds more natural?
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Can your food market pass a simple taste test?
At Balducci’s, we put taste first.
This spring, we’re loading up our stores with fresh and chef-crafted foods that are simply bursting with flavor.
Like majestic orange wild king salmon, flown in daily.
And specialties like champagne ham, slow-smoked over hickory chips and glazed with pineapple juice and brown sugar.
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The food lover’s market.Thanks for listening!
Good Work! The Vanderbilt read had the right tone for what was intended. It sounded like you read the Save Them All read with the same tone, which didn’t quite fit as well. Parts of it were a little monotone, and other pieces that had pitch variety (the opposite of monotone) had similar rhythms. It can be hard to have good pitch variety, but try to read the script as if you were speaking it to someone in your everyday life.
Keep it up!
Hi everyone! I’m looking for some feedback on natural delivery and whether I have enough variety in pitch. Thanks for listening!
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With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.Great work! You sound like you’re getting close! You might want to think about blending words together as you speak them. In the recording, there are several times in which certain words are spoken as if they were alone. While not in your Hersheys script, an example of what I’m talking about is this: instead of saying “Best Stuff”, say “Besstuff”, like you would say it naturally. I hope that helps!
Your voice fits well with the script you’re reading! I’d say tone down your delivery a little, act less like you’re shouting. Also, try smoothing out the words, instead of emphasizing them all. Your read might be more smooth that way.
Great work! Keep it up!
Does this sound like a commercial? I’m trying to improve my natural delivery by varying my pitch. Thanks for any feedback!
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