[kfvoice]

Hi Mary!

Your dictation was clear in your read, although try a little longer micro-pause after your first sentence. I listened a couple of times, and you sounded rushed leading into the second sentence compared to the others. I could tell there were certain words you were trying to vary your tone and pitch with — just a little more oomph and enthusiasm, and you’ve got it! I could hear a noise in the background — are you recording with a mic yet?

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Thanks Mary! I was definitely trying to enunciate almonds and not slur, but the word does get drawn out a little too much!

[kfvoice]

Hello everybody! I’m looking for feedback on this read for enunciation and pacing. It’s a commercial read; not my normal narration. Thanks again!

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[kfvoice]

Hi Alexis — Your pace and enunciation were great. The energy for the read I felt was spot on, and your pitch variation hit the right words, too. Nice read. As for quality of the recording, I didn’t hear any background noise, however, I did not have my earphones in either.

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi Alexis!

I agree, I do need to bring more enthusiasm to the read.

I am happy to know the sound quality is good, though, and my pace and diction here is good as well. The enunciation and slower pace is something I have been struggling with. I am confident all pieces of the puzzle will fit together soon!

Thank you much for the feedback! I appreciate it!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi Mary!

Noted! Appreciate the feedback!

I agree about the pitch. Definitely need to work on that. However, I am glad to know my enunciation was good — that is something I am trying to better achieve before putting everything together, so to speak.

Thanks again!
Kathy

[kfvoice]

I completely understand where you are coming from, where it sounds one way to you when reading, but sounds different when listening. We will get there!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hello everyone! Telephony narration for critique. Recorded this one with a mic (no pop filter at the moment), so I am still getting used to it. All feedback is welcome and appreciated!

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[kfvoice]

Hi Amanda! Welcome!

I agree with the previous comments, there was more enthusiasm in your second read.

In your first read, the second sentence is very long, however, be mindful of micro-pauses where they are not intended. I did notice you read I will use cell C2. as “I’ll” use cell C2. Remember to read the script as it is written.

Good first read!

Kathy

[kfvoice]

Hi Mary! I like how you billboarded “Freshii” in your opening line. Try varying your pitch when you are asking (to your audience) your questions. Hope this helps. Keep it up!

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