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Hey Mary, nice work! I will make notes on the second piece. I think this one was really well done. There were a couple things that popped out to me:
on six at “age six” your inflection was in an upspeak so if you are ending a sentence or phrase with an upspeak it sounds like you are asking a question or are unsure of what you are saying. So since this is a statement I would suggest not using upspeak there. I also thing there are more commas in this script than are needed. Sometimes you have to let go of certain commas otherwise it will just sound more choppy. Pausing between ideas instead of abiding by every comma will sound more natural. But really nice work! I could tell this is a topic that you really enjoy, way to go!Hey everyone, here is a biography narration for Beyonce! It is similar to the T Swift biography going on my narration demo. Just working on similar scripts for practice. ALl feedback is appreciated.
Beyoncé Knowles is a founding member and chief songwriter of Destiny’s Child, one of the biggest selling female acts of all time. With many of the group’s***t songs co-written and co-produced by Beyoncé, Destiny’s Child has sold more than 33 million records worldwide. When Beyoncé won the 2001 ASCAP Pop Songwriter Of The Year Award, she became the first African-American woman — and the second woman ever — to receive that honor.
Hey there! Nothing technical stood out to me that you could improve. You could try sounding a little more enthusiastic or have more energy if this is for students as young as 10, but totally depends on what the client is asking for – as you stated. Really nice work!
Hi there! I thought this was a nice read and a good fit for your voice. I thought you could pace it a little bit more carefully. You seemed to keep a very quick tempo throughout. In natural speech, we tend to speed up on the not important words and give more attention to the important words. For instance: ” 50 start-ups,
spawned 350 patents, and pushed countless programs to be the nation’s best.” You can give more weight to the important words. Varying your pace and slowing down on the important words will help it sound more conventional and allow us as the listener to know what is important. And at the same time don’t get too in your head about the pacing (two opposing things LOL) But really nice work!Hello, good day! I’m going for relaxed, natural, and friendly narration for what I can assume is a travelogue video for the town of Hershey. I specifically wanted to tone it down and just sound natural VS commercial. Any feedback is appreciated!
Hershey Tour
Welcome to Hershey, the Great American Chocolate Town, where families come together for a taste of the sweet life. Tucked in the rolling hills of Central Pennsylvania, this idyllic escape offers the latest and greatest in entertainment and hospitality, fused with the traditions of one of America’s original success stories. Even the smiles seem sweeter! With attractions, accommodations, amenities and activities in all flavors, a trip to “The Sweetest Place on Earth” is an easy treat.Hey Barb, first of all you are great! Awesome audio quality as well. Way to go! I would say that the list and the beginning all blended into one idea from what I could hear. It took me a few listens to understand that there were 3 things being pointed out for a care plan. I would say you could pace it a little more carefully/slowly as it would be accompanying a video. Maybe you could pause a little longer at “care plan (pause) that includes” Just to let us catch up with you. I think once you got into the list you offered some great variety in the list. Maybe my brain is just slow because it is the end of my day lol! But great job, the copy is a perfect fit for your voice.
Hi there Jay! Nice read! I liked your tone of voice. One thing that popped out to me was your pause between “overcrowd a spot” There was a glottal stop here where you completely closed the back of your mouth between “overcrowd (close) a” this results in a harsh onset or “glottal stop” of the word “a”. Its common with vowels. To smooth this out you can imagine the word is spelled like this “overcrowdah”
Hope that helps! Once you recognize glottal stops you will never unsee them again (or should I say unhear) and we all do it!
Hi all! Its been a minute since I’ve posted anything in the forum. Here is a cold read. I realize there are some plosives and I mispronounced “East Campus”. I’m working on something I’ve been learning at Larry Hudson’s vocal workout group. He says “There are Phrases, and inside phrases are Ideas, and within ideas are beats” I’ve been blasting through my sentences for fear of the dreaded micropause where there shouldn’t be pauses, but in studying how to sound conversational, I realize that we do pause when we talk at certain times, often at the points mentioned above. Anyways, any feedback is appreciated thank you!
Welcome to Gordon College!
This tour begins just outside the tunnel that goes under College Drive near the flagpole.
We will tour East campus first, followed by West Campus, and end the tour back here at the tunnel.
Periodically, I will ask you to pause the recording so that you can walk to the next point or take a few minutes to independently tour the area.
I will always use the word “pause” when you need to pause the recording.
And I will always use the word “stop” when you need to stop walking while I continue speaking.
