[katelyndawnvo]

Good evening folks. Well here is my first “narration” read. I start my training this week for narration. I am just flying by the seat of my pants on this one haha! Any feedback is appreciated.

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[katelyndawnvo]

Wow this is so fancy! Great bass tone in your voice. For a few plays I couldn’t understand “world’s” but I also don’t know how Mr. Earl Jones speaks. I’d love to hear more from you 🙂

[katelyndawnvo]

Thank you Mary!

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi peeps! Here is a commercial read. Put together this script, any feedback is appreciated!

Sun B*m Hair Lightener is formulated to brighten your hair by amplifying the natural highlighting effects of the sun.
It’s infused with pineapples and lemons and has a hydrogen peroxide boost for faster results.
It smells like sunkissed summer, and does all the good things with none of the bad things.

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[katelyndawnvo]

Very nice work Mary. Your tone is so warm and inviting. I think that the pace is a little carefully spoken and paced out a but slow. There were some pauses in the first sentence: “Planning a group event can be an enormous undertaking whether it’s a work meeting,” and with this whole part being 1 idea does not need any pausing. My coach suggested putting brackets around ideas [—-] that signify that it is 1 idea and so there does not need to be pauses there. Nice work! 🙂

[katelyndawnvo]

Really nice work! I also really loved the allstate read. The wrangler read I thought could have been a bit more enthusiastic or have a varied pitch/tone to it while still maintaining that “wrangler” edge. Good stuff!

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi guys! Been a couple days. My demo record went so great! Here is a script I put together for a commercial read. Any feedback is appreciated! Have a great day.
Katelyn

Andalou Naturals sunflower & citrus styling gel gives you a healthy shine and protects your hair against heat and humidity.
Sunflower and Tangerine Oils brighten hair tone and revitalize follicles.
This natural gel does so much more than you would expect.

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Hi! Here is a PSA for an eating disorder. Warning: this is about an eating disorder which may be triggering. I’m recording my demo tomorrow!! Wish me luck 🙂
Katelyn

Eating Disorder PSA:
You notice your friend has been throwing away her lunch. She’s started wearing baggy clothes – all the time. She seems tired. These are warnings of an eating disorder, the deadliest mental illness we know. But early treatment is the key to recovery. And as a friend you can be the difference.

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[katelyndawnvo]

Very lovely read. You have a great voice for medical narration. I would say with this read there were pauses so you could work on smoothing out the pauses and only pause between ideas/sentences. You did a much smoother read for the 2nd and 3rd sentence, so the first one os more “pause-y” than the other two. Really nice work!

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi Andrea, I really love the tone and timbre of your voice. You sound like a very mature put-together adult. A mom and a professional. I would believe you if you were talking about medical things or insurance. I know you weren’t asking that but that’s what I think of when I hear your voice. The first part of this read felt like the energy/tone was just too low but once you say “Listen… I love real estate…” I think from that point on you are hitting a nice “natural, chill, but still interested” vibe. Nice work!

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