[John Trape]

Hi Mary,

Thank you very much for your feedback and encouragement! Yes, you are quite right about the pauses and the squishing of words. Art zeroed in on this tendency straightaway. I really have to watch this.

Thank you again,

John

[John Trape]

Hello Everyone,

I have two narration scripts for which I would very much appreciate any feedback.

Albert Einstein

Albert Einstein was a genius, and one of the greatest physicists of all time. His famous Theories of Relativity, which describe the relationship between mass and energy, and between space and time, were published in 1905 and 1916. Einstein was born of Jewish parents in Ulm, Germany. He spent many years in Switzerland, becoming a Swiss citizen in 1901, and gaining his Doctor of Philosophy degree in 1905 from Zurich University. It was while employed as a patent clerk in Berne that he published his first Theory of Relativity. This contained his famous equation: E=mc2, which explains the relationship between mass and energy.

30-Second Financial Sales Training Video Voice Over Script Sample

Okay, now we need to dive into what it looks like to start our ‘slow-trickle’ of products to the potential client.

Once that trust is formed, then we can start a slow passing along of custom reports, data and recommendations that are tailored to the potential client, always ensuring they’re being educated and equipped with new info along the way.

We want to give the savvy entrepreneurs that are looking to bank with us so much insight, that they can’t see how they’d take on this venture without us.

Thank you,

John

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[John Trape]

Hi Mary,

I certainly found your read conversational, authentic, and personal. In particular, your opening two sentences and your concluding sentence.

This is such a valuable time for me as I learn how you and others are interpreting scripts, choosing tone, and targeting pitch.

Thank you,

John

[John Trape]

Hi Katelyn,

I thought that this was such a clear, engaging, and personal read. I replayed this a number of times just to absorb how, I felt, that you had interpreted your script. For me, a very educational experience.

Thank you.

John

[John Trape]

Hi Jon,

I am very impressed by your work, by your range, and by your website. Your demo was a real pleasure to listen to, and you must be very satisfied. Thank you.

John

[John Trape]

Hi Mary,

I certainly felt that you made your script conversational. I thought that your opening and concluding sentences sounded friendly, welcoming, and natural – in particular your “and American Express keeps it that way”, which came across to me as being absolutely genuine.

Regards,

John

[John Trape]

Hi Toque,

Yes, I thoroughly enjoyed listening to your reads and then going back over each one to appreciate how you applied the desired tone. I felt that each read just seemed so natural, so conversational.

Thank you,

John.

[John Trape]

Hi MrGenadry! I thoroughly enjoyed listening to your recording and then absorbing Mary’s and Toque’s observations. A particularly useful exercise for me, being new to the game, so to speak. I felt that you had really spent time interpreting the script, and that you knew exactly how you wished to connect with your intended audience. You should be pretty pleased!

Kind regards,

John

[John Trape]

Hi Toque,

Fully agree with Mary’s feedback. I decided to listen, without following the script. Your calm, engaging delivery held my attention, and I wanted to hear what you had to say.
A very nice way to start the day!

Kind regards,

John

[John Trape]

Hi Luke,

Thank you very much for your encouragement.

Kind regards,

John

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