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Tim, thanks for that good constructive critique. I like what you said about being intrigued (or not) by the subject. My coach brings that up too. May be something to it! 🙂
Hello, everyone! Hoping to get some feedback on this documentary script read for my narration demo. Thanks!
In 1980, the most violent eruption in North America in nearly a century wiped out virtually all life for 200 square miles. In recent years, scientists have detected ominous signs Mount Saint Helens is awakening. Their quest to understand one of the most complicated volcanoes in the world is revealing new mysteries deep inside the mountain.
Hello! I liked your energy on all of them. It sounds like you may have an acting background, based on how naturally you inflect your voice to convey different emotions. I though they were all good. Perhaps the Honda spot could be a tad less energetic or slightly lower in volume. I think that more energetic approach was great for Starbucks and Match, but less effective for Honda. Your demo will be awesome.
As part of my narration demo, I would like to include something from the true crime genre. These are my first two attempts. My wife says I don’t sound evil enough… I’d love to hear which one you all think is best and any specific pointers!
1. M****R FOR HIRE. It began, cops would tell Nancy, when they stopped a man named Aaron Wilkinson for a simple traffic violation. After spotting a gun in his car, deputies took Wilkinson to the station and were shocked when he told them he’d been hired to k**l a woman he didn’t even know. So who then who was the intended target? That’s right: Nancy Latham.
2. DISAPPEARANCE OF TANNER WARD. Tenton, Missouri, is too small of a town to get lost in. But one evening last June, 19-year-old Tanner Ward, engaged to be married, father to a precious baby girl, vanished into thin air. Tanner’s family desperately searches for him, and police follow up on every lead, but they’re all dead ends.
Extremely pleasant voice to listen to. The first couple of sentences sounded a bit choppy to me, but then you seemed to connect your words better toward the end. I also had the impression that you sped up a bit at the end. Overall, well done!
I listened to both, and agree that they are both very similar… I think Chris gave a great suggestion (letting someone in on a secret). Or maybe just a hint of seduction in the delivery…? Very nice voice, btw.
Your voice is really nice to listen to. Nothing to add, but I agree with Toque’s comments. Maybe just add a bit of emotion. I have listened to some of your other uploads. I think you have a ton of natural talent.
