JAE Factor
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SwKeys, I liked both recordings. Your opening inflection on the question, “Muscle aches” was great! I felt like that set the tone for the commercial. Furthermore, I think your diction and pacing are quite good. The only constructive critique I have would be at the beginning of Waterpik. It sounded like you rushed trough “two handed tug-o-war” and it didn’t come out clearly. Otherwise, good job!
Alright everyone it’s been a while, but I am finally submitting my homework for session 5. This is it! The session before my demo. Let me know what you all think!
Hey Mitch! I definitely enjoyed your delivery for Script 1. From the beginning I saw a salesperson waving me in with a smile on their face, especially with how you said, “Come to D***y Hands Garden Center…” One thing I would recommend is differentiating your list in the beginning to add some color and draw their interest in. Nevertheless, Script 1 was great!
On Script 2, I could hear you aiming for a sincere tone at 0:13 and I like how you carried that through the thought, creating a sense of urgency.
Hi Sarah, I could visualize the commercial as you were delivering the spot; it sounded natural. I did hear the echo you mentioned and I would recommend either trimming it or using a tool to reduce that particular sound – depending on the editing software you’re using.
Otherwise, this was a good delivery, I liked it.
Tommy, you truly have the voice for commercials. I really enjoyed your Kraft Mac and Cheese segment; it sounded like an ad kids would latch onto.
That said, I felt like your tempo on the Spotify and Kraft deliveries was a bit fast. I think if you slowed down a bit and connected with the script, these would be even more awesome! Great job overall!
