Grace17
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Hello everyone,
Here are 3 narration audios. I would love feedback on any of them. Blue Angels and Covideo are sales videos, and Space Camp is a children’s museum exhibit. Thank you!
Hey! I would love some technique/delivery feedback on this. I left the breaths in, so if you have any advice on breathing technique that’ll be great too. Thanks!
Hey! I would love some technique/delivery feedback on this. I left the breaths in, so if you have any advice on breathing technique that’ll be great too. Thanks!
Your audio volume level is great and your voice is perfect for this read! I would say the beginning up until “running mates” needs more flow in the words, it’s a little choppy with pauses that are too long. Try not to overthink what you’re saying and lastly I would recommend trying to let more of your personality out. You had more personality from “This video” onwards but it’ll be great to hear that more through out.
Not too explainy at all! Thank you for the feedback! You mentioned really good points I’ll work on:)
Yes, sounds like a good amount of pitch range. Definitely doesn’t sound monotone. Thinking of a particular person or situation that makes you feel in a way that is appropriate to the script, and not holding back your personality could also help against sounding monotone.
The ziploc read, though good technique-wise, sounded disengaged from the product. It’ll be more engaging if you smiled when speaking of ziploc’s superiority so that i believe that you believe what you’re saying. I also liked the first Nike read better, your tone fit with the message of the read(i.e.: perseverance, strength, etc.), whereas the tone of the second read sounded uninvested in the message.
Hi Marti,
Your voice really suits the cosmos read, but on my end your volume is too low, so if you’re using an audio interface, you should turn the dial up on the input. I had the same problem and that helped me. For both reads, I would recommend not to try too hard so you don’t say things in a way that is forceful, like “scattered” in the cosmos read. On the cosmos read, your style of reading seems to change dramatically from “on which we know” to be more sing-songy and have a wider pitch range. I think the change is too dramatic, so it’s shocking and distracts from what you’re saying. It’s fine to change pace, emotion, etc. in a read but I think the change is unjustified, in this case.
I would also recommend listing each phrase characterizing earth as if it ends in a period, rather than inverting(discussed in Edge Studio guidebook) the last word of each phrase. This would make you sound more like an expert as you list it, instead of sounding casual.
With the wonder years read, though I heard the slight changes in emotions as you say each phrase, i think you could be more believable. I think to help with believability, you should have a reason for everything your character says. Not trying too hard, and trusting the analysis you’ve done on the script beforehand could help improve the reads.
