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Hey RCampos,
Thanks for your feedback on my post! Your voice is warm and pretty conversational. You’re not straining your voice and “pushing” which is great. I would say it would add to the believability of your delivery to quicken the pace because unless it’s requested to speak at this pace, in a conversation you would say this at a slightly faster – conversational level – pace. I also suggest determining the words you want to “hit” beforehand and highlighting/bolding them so you don’t miss the opportunity to hit words that are important for the message like little, sunlight, gravity, atoms, fundamentally, important, cosmos, time, etc. Though it’s your choice what words you think should be hit. Lastly, it felt like you had a matter-of-fact attitude for this read. There are various attitudes(ex: instructional, strict, compassionate) you could have with the read, so try experimenting, and that will also help you incorporate your personality into your reads more, which will make them even more believable.Wow this was so good!! I loved it! Your voice and your accent fit great! Perhaps try it with more personality and range in your tone.
For App notification, the read is a nice pace. I would recommend more flow between your words while maintaining the great enunciation you already have.
WorkLife is also a nice pace and great read. Your attitude and tone remain the same throughout and that attitude and tone is great for setting up the “problem” in the copy but there’s a change in the message and it doesn’t sound like your tone and attitude changed enough with it. In my opinion, from “Let’s focus on some of the daily choices you can make.” a more upbeat, tone would match the solutions you’re presenting now.
The pace is nice in climate change and Greece 2.0. I recommend letting more of your personality out to improve the believability of the reads, especially when it comes to the seriousness of climate change, without pushing of course. Just a little thing, the line “Greece is actually very affordable if you know where to go” could benefit from sounding more like you’re telling me a secret, or like you’re about to reveal something big. You’re on your way to making a great demo though!
Hi,
I just decided to add this one too. It sounds nice and professional I believe, but I thought it was too quiet and sleep-inducing, but let me know what you think.Hi,
There may not be much of a difference between these takes, but I was speaking to different people in each take. Which do you like better and why? What’s good, and what could be improved? I really appreciate your time giving feedback, thank you very much.Hi,
I would love feedback on what’s great, could be improved, or better about either of these takes. Really appreciate your time! Thank you!You sound friendly and knowledgeable, professional as well. I really like how pleasant and resonant your voice is. Your read is really good! It’s hard to give feedback on it because there’s nothing really “wrong” with it. It sounds like a tour that would be in a museum. I sensed some genuine emotion in the read, but I think it would benefit from displaying more of that genuine emotion and personality. That would really make it “pop” above the competition in an audition I think. Because this narration is a little long (even though it’s just 1 minute, small attention span I guess), I think it’s very important to keep the listener’s attention. It seemed like you were reading a bit predictably, and by sounding more like a machine in some parts, my mind stopped paying as much attention. I would advise inviting more range in tone and genuine emotion to keep the listener’s attention. But regardless, this was a great read!
You have a very nice clear voice, with great enunciation. However, the tones used for these two reads don’t match or make sense with the message so the attitude you gave seemed disconnected from the message to me. So I would say try to integrate the attitude with the words or message, so it’s believable that these are your words.
Your voice sounds really clear with great enunciation. I think you’re getting there with the conversational aspect. I don’t quite feel as an audience member that you’re talking to me. It still has a manufactured sort of robotic tone to it. I advice choosing someone you have a relationship with in real life and REALLY talking to them while still enunciating words well like you do. Practice makes it easier. Forget that you’re recording or putting on a performance and focus on your intent in speaking to your imagined person.
