Grace17
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Hi Everyone,
I would love technique feedback on this documentary read. Don’t mind any background noise. Thank you!
You sounded authentic, like a real person, and playful which makes the read fun to listen to. But the tone you used for “boss” didn’t sound like you were confident in that. The first line, up until “beautiful” doesn’t sound confident enough to me. Complicated and complex are redundant. Also, I recommend reevaluating what words to hit. Hit the descriptive words(ex: “complex”) in phrases like “I’m complex” rather than the “i’m” part. And natural would benefit from being hit since that’s the main selling point of the product.
These are really nice confident reads. I recommend talking to someone. Really talk to them, to avoid the times when it sounds like you’re reading. And also smiling to show you have confidence in the information you’re saying.
A pace in between these two would be best for most cases in my opinion. You don’t want to elongate words too much since if you were having a conversation, that would confuse the person and being too fast, the person would not process most of what you say. You have a very brief pause between each beat in the script and that’s very nice.
Also, do you sense variety between the reads? Would you recommend more variety between them to market myself?
Please excuse the mic pops and i’m not looking for technical feedback but feedback on technique and believability as I’m about to record my narration demo. Thanks!
Hey RCampos,
Thanks for your feedback on my post! Your voice is warm and pretty conversational. You’re not straining your voice and “pushing” which is great. I would say it would add to the believability of your delivery to quicken the pace because unless it’s requested to speak at this pace, in a conversation you would say this at a slightly faster – conversational level – pace. I also suggest determining the words you want to “hit” beforehand and highlighting/bolding them so you don’t miss the opportunity to hit words that are important for the message like little, sunlight, gravity, atoms, fundamentally, important, cosmos, time, etc. Though it’s your choice what words you think should be hit. Lastly, it felt like you had a matter-of-fact attitude for this read. There are various attitudes(ex: instructional, strict, compassionate) you could have with the read, so try experimenting, and that will also help you incorporate your personality into your reads more, which will make them even more believable.Wow this was so good!! I loved it! Your voice and your accent fit great! Perhaps try it with more personality and range in your tone.
For App notification, the read is a nice pace. I would recommend more flow between your words while maintaining the great enunciation you already have.
WorkLife is also a nice pace and great read. Your attitude and tone remain the same throughout and that attitude and tone is great for setting up the “problem” in the copy but there’s a change in the message and it doesn’t sound like your tone and attitude changed enough with it. In my opinion, from “Let’s focus on some of the daily choices you can make.” a more upbeat, tone would match the solutions you’re presenting now.
The pace is nice in climate change and Greece 2.0. I recommend letting more of your personality out to improve the believability of the reads, especially when it comes to the seriousness of climate change, without pushing of course. Just a little thing, the line “Greece is actually very affordable if you know where to go” could benefit from sounding more like you’re telling me a secret, or like you’re about to reveal something big. You’re on your way to making a great demo though!
