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RoxyMel,
Your diction is on spot and I liked that you considered a slower pace at the beginning for imagery. I always forget that mostly for videos and that you considered speeding up your pace towards mid- to end to get listeners excited for whats to come. You did well varying your lists as well it kept me engaged. Nice Job!Hi Tracy,
I think both of your reads are good with pace and diction. I don’t think it sounds read, I think your tone might be a little strong for clearair but I can see that you are making it more of a serious read given the topic. The only thing I would pay attention to is enunciation on both and where you’re giving emphasis.For this read, I hear that you’re trying to make it flow, but there are several things that’s causing it to be choppy. The first is where you’re pausing and the second is where you should have breaths. So be aware of pauses in the copy and make a note of where you should take breaths. Once you have those in the right places it should help your read to flow better.
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I remembered your first read and yes you’re headed in the right direction. The beginning sounds alittle read but as you get towards the end you seem more relax and that sounds more conversational so just be more relaxed with your reads. Your diction seems clear to me. Keep it up!Hi
4H:Your voice pairs well with this script, I noticed its a pretty long script so nice job breaking it down. I would just be mindful of your diction when you said ideal instead of idea, heartland and I notice when you are about to say to you slur into the next word not sure if you noticed that.
Cosmos: The read was good the only word not clear was rippling, it sounds like your volume went down at that moment. I like that you had variations with your pace and the read was natural. Keep it up!Hi
Ziploc:Nice delivery with this read, it sounds natural, your pace and diction are great
Nike: Both reads sounded natural with Nike. I prefer the first Nike read, your delivery had me engaged throughout pace and diction were great. The second read sounded alot like the first. If you’re aiming for alternative try changing your tone, pace, inflection. I didn’t really hear that on the second, I heard that you changed some of your emphasis on the words but not really changing the things mentioned above. Good job overall!Hi Lance,
Sorry you didn’t get shortlisted. Your read does sound like you’re talking down to your audience versus having a conversation with them. The pace is a little too slow and there isn’t a lot of variation in this read which makes it a flat read. So maybe try a little more energy and inflection next time with a faster pace. Keep at it!
