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Hi Grace! I listened to the Ozark piece. Primarily I noticed that you speed up a fair amount by the end, and you lost me a bit especially in the action-y part. Sounds like a cold open so, I imagine it does move pretty fast and I read that you cut time between sentences to make it shorter but I wished I could keep up with some of those rapid fire images coming at me at the end. The other thing I noticed on second listen was that some hard consonant sounds are a little swallowed up: the T at the end of “follows suit” and in “tread water” and the k sound at the end of “lake”. your volume is a little low in general but you have a lovely voice and these are mostly small details/quick fixes. keep it up!
Hi everybody! Back with a couple more reads. Definitely only looking for technique and performance notes, as I am recording on the phone. Here are some things I’m working on.
With the Corona Refresca spot, I was looking for the right pacing. Trying to find the heartbeat of the thing to keep the energy up. (I rewrote it a little since coolers are out and spiked seltzers are in.)
and with the NYCannabis spot, I was prioritizing sounding conversational while listing the very serious legalese/rules.
General feedback and notes are also appreciated!
Thanks,
GHi there! I really appreciate this kind of copy and your soothing read. I agree with the above comment, and I think there is also a need to “paint a picture” since you are inside of your workshop. I felt that really working for you in the beginning, the images of wooden tables and tools hung on the wall coming through! and then as your conversation became more abstract you did float away from the realness of that. That does seem to be the challenge built into the script, but you’re not unsuccessful! Keep at it!
Hi Joyce! Great tone and super natural on your Macys read. I think I could use a little more differentiation or build on the list of sales/ percentages. could just be the way my brain works but I tend to glaze over when numbers get involved. keeping the energy up or ramping up may help!
Hi everyone! My name is Gigi, i’m very excited to be here and publishing some practice records to the forum for the first time.
I worked on these two in my last coaching session and recorded these this morning. with both i’m working on naturalism (really sounding conversational) and pacing, which my coach described as “a bit too quick”
With the Freshii copy (which I spiced up/rewrote a bit from the script library,) i was working on diction, specifically one syllable words like “to” & “and” and the dropouts on the last parts of certain words.
With the Bare Minerals copy I was focusing on list differentiation (as there are a couple lists in this copy) as well as uplifting/hitting the brand & product names in a comfortable sounding way.
How did i do?
