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Hi Sylvanie! Beautiful, soothing voice! On the AMEX script, you read thru the product name at the end. Make sure you emphasize “Blue” so it stands out. On the Kids Explorer one, loved your read throughout on this one. My only comment is also on the closing. You left the sentence open ended– like Logan mentioned above, swooping upward… wouldn’t suggest using it on your ending. Great job!
@Sylvanie / @Provocaleric / @RoxyMel — Thank you so much for your feedback! Noted on all and agree with your comments. Will take this in consideration for my future reads. Thank you, thank you!
Hello Edge Friends!
Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 3 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!
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Hello Edge Friends!
Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 3 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!
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Hi Wes! Your voice is definitely suited for narration. This was a nice read, but I would slow down the pace a bit. Make it a bit more conversational.
Hi Michael! These are great reads. You have clear diction and enunciation, and love how you highlighted key words and maintained a great pace in all of these. My only note would be on “E-learning.” I wish you had a bit more fun with that one like you did with “Travel Guide Video.” While your read was good, warm and relaxed, maybe could have read it a bit more playful since the audience seems to be kids based on the copy. But overall, these were great!
