[CHRISTOPHER WHITING]

Thank you for the feedback. It is greatly appreciated. I’m continuing to work on sounding natural and hope to nail it sometime before I’m pushing up daisies, lol.

[CHRISTOPHER WHITING]

Hello gang,
I’ve attached 3 commercial scripts here and welcome all feedback. You guys are definitely helping me get better and I greatly appreciate it!

Thanks,
Chris

JC Penney 6
Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.

Allstate
Truth is, motorcycle insurance costs about the same. What’s not the same, is the coverage. Now you can get the AllState protection you need.. for a price you can afford. Talk to an All State agent today. Are you in good hands?

Honey Bunches of Oats
It’s amazing! I never thought one cereal would make my whole family stay for breakfast. HONEY BUNCHES OF OATS. There’s never been a cereal like it. With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats. Finally … a cereal my whole family loves.

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Hi all,
I’m uploading my latest commercial homework reads and I’d love to get your feedback!

Thanks,
Chris

Bartenders Professional Training Institute

Who said work can’t be fun?
Train now at the bartenders professional training institute in Rochester
And you could be bartending in just four short weeks
The work’s fun, the pay’s great, and you meet some fabulous people.
Professional Bartending schools of america
Go to PBSA.com for more details.
That’s PBSA.com

Cleaner Elections

Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics?
Do they think it really helps their campaign?
It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful.
So why do we allow them to continue?
It’s time to level the playing field.
You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.

Clem the Prospector-Nebraska Lottery

Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector her to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel. all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin’ in this old mountain here. The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska lottery.

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Thank you for the feedback! I greatly appreciate it and will work on being more conversational.

[CHRISTOPHER WHITING]

Hi all,
Another round of homework for my commercial demo. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Thanks,
Chris

American Cancer Society
It’s tough to quit smoking. Just ask any of the 50 million Americans who continue to puff away, even though they know the toll it takes on health and longevity. When it comes to breaking this lethal habit, the most effective tool is willpower. The American Cancer Society now offers a free video for those smokers who feel they can’t quit alone. Call the AMERICAN CANCER SOCIETY today, at 1-800-575-2424

Motivational informercial
Listen in as we share the research-proven formula for success. Plus, athletes, stars and trainers share their motivational tips! All coming up in the next 30-minutes!

Ziplock 2
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.

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Thanks very much for taking the time to listen. I greatly appreciate the feedback and the tip about envisioning talking to one person. I’m trying to work on turning down the announcer-y-ness of my delivery and will continue to work on it.

[CHRISTOPHER WHITING]

Hey gang,
Here’s my latest practice for Commercial. I’d love to get your feedback.

Thanks,
Chris

Freshii
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!

Infiniti QX50
The 2019 Infiniti QX50…luxury should be lived in…lease the all new Infiniti QX50 for 379 a month…Infiniti…Empower the Drive

Excedrin
Headaches. We all get them. We all wish they would go away. There is a solution. Excedrin. I just take two and there’s no more tension, no more throbbing, no more pain. My headache is completely gone.

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Hi all, I’m getting ready for my first commercial coaching session and am doing a little pre-work. Please take a listen and let me know your thoughts. Thanks! Chris

Quality Inn
When he checked in, he was Mr. Simmons. When he checked out, he was just plain Bob. Quality Inn. We’ll see you there.

Trendi.com
Trendi.com. It’s the #1 shopping site for top name brands at up to 75% off. Great style, great value and everything ships free. Trendi.com. Everything you love, for less.

NO!
Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!

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Thank you for the feedback. I’m working on correct emphasis, so that bit is particularly helpful for me. Much appreciated!

[CHRISTOPHER WHITING]

Thank you for the feedback. I will definitely work on emphasizing important words, eg., FREE. And thanks for calling out the pronunciation of the medical terms, I’d like to focus on that type of VO.

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