[chloeblackstone]

Hi Ashley! I liked your reads, both sound natural. My note for you on Primanti Bros one, I’m noticing each sentence seems to end on the same pitch. Maybe you could try varying the tone / pitch of the last word of each sentence, to keep the listener engaged.

[chloeblackstone]

thank you Gill!

[chloeblackstone]

Hi Folks! I would love some feedback on this B****r documentary take. Things I’m working on are diction, and pitching down consistently at the end of sentences. Any input is welcome! Thanks. – Chloe

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[chloeblackstone]

thanks much for the tip! Oh yeah i hear the clicking. I forgot to add my little disclaimer of “please dont mind the bad audio it was recorded on my phone!” 🙂

wondering if y’all can pick up on the congestion in my voice, too. i’m having a rough allergy season and i’m trying my best to work through it!

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi everyone! I tried to post yesterday but I don’t see it anywhere on here, so apologies if i double-posted this. Anyway I’m looking for feedback for narration coaching homework. Anything helps! Thanks for listening. -Chloe

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi pmuller, I agree with the other commenter that your enunciation and articulation is great. I don’t know much about the genre for Phyto, so I have no notes on that one.

For the “Back to Life Journal” recording, I’m hearing a repeating rhythmic pattern in this read. As a listener, that was distracting me from the meaning of the words you are saying, and I started to just hear words. I would recommend visualizing an individual and speaking directly to them. Remember you are trying to convince someone to read this journal. You wanna embody this copy and give this text a little more enthusiasm to engage the listener. Hope that helps! Keep going, well done!

[chloeblackstone]

I would try adding a little smile to the “National” read to bring it to life. And picture someone you’re speaking directly to.

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Roman! You have a really nice, clear voice. Well done!

I have the same notes for both samples. It sounds a bit like you’re reading, and I think that’s because each sentence ends on the same “note.” If you vary the ends of each sentence, so it goes “up and down,” it should sound more natural and spontaneous. Also don’t forget to emphasize the brand name in “Subway restaurants.”

[chloeblackstone]

Hi Provocaleric! Your voice is very smooth, clear, and professional! Since this read is all about Blood Glucose Meters, I would make sure to emphasize the words “blood glucose meter” in the first sentence. My other recommendation is to picture someone you are speaking to throughout the copy. Great job, overall. keep it up!

[chloeblackstone]

Nice reads! I enjoyed listening. You have a voice that really suits the copy you chose. For “Making Candy,” you sound really clear and well-paced. I would pay attention to the pitch at the end of each sentence – you’re pitching down a lot. If you vary the end pitch, it will sound more attention grabbing.

For Tesla, I loved this read. I would slow down though, I noticed some words run into each other. Since it’s instructional you want the listener to really hear and process each word you’re saying so they don’t have to listen a second time.

For Creating a New E-mail, this is longer copy, but take your time reading it and don’t rush it. I would also recommend vary the pitches a little as well. Your voice really sounds great with this copy though! Very nice read.

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