[burdahgirl]

Hi Jbach! I think it’s a good read, really clear and good pacing. I would suggest playing around with a little more pitch variance in there to keep it from being too stagnant? I hope that’s helpful!

[burdahgirl]

Oh man, it’s so good! I now have an understanding of what my coach is always saying about creating connection – you nailed it!

[burdahgirl]

Thanks for any feedback!

Habitat For Humanity
Script:
Every 7 minutes around the world, Habitat for Humanity serves a family in need of decent housing. Affordable housing solutions might differ from place to place, but to the families who dream of them, help build them and eventually inhabit them, they all add up to just one thing. Home.

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[burdahgirl]

Bill – that is amazing! The first one was my husband. Second was a friend and her husband from work. The third was actually my stepdaughter but I can see why you would think older adult. Thanks for commenting and helping me out! 🤗

[burdahgirl]

This is day two of my self prescribed exercise – read the same script imagining talking to three distinctly different people. Recorded on my phone, so apologies for the less than ideal quality. I’m really trying to just focus on this one aspect for a few rounds to try to understand it better and perform it better.

Thanks for any insight!

“If you‘re in the dark about where to ski, let us shed some light on the subject. High in Virginia‘
s Blue Ridge Mountains, discover what‘s been called the Mid-Atlantic‘s finest overall
ski experience. Wintergreen offers 10 slopes, five lifts, and an extensive snow-making
system. Not to mention luxurious accommodations, an indoor spa, and a nationally recognized
children‘s program. For more information, call 1-800-ski-green. That‘s 1-800-skigreen.
Wintergreen and Virginia … the perfect combination!”

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[burdahgirl]

I’m so motivated listening to this read – I think that means you did your job! Great work!

[burdahgirl]

Sounds like it should be the official commercial. Well done!

[burdahgirl]

O*G, Gerber baby all day every day, that was great! I’d love to hear that level of energy, in an appropriate way, in the Aruba script too. Great work!!

[burdahgirl]

Hey Mary, Great read! My only feedback would be that when you get to “Excedrin” the first time, maybe there could be a more audible tone shift towards relief. Overall a great tone and pace – wonderful job!

[burdahgirl]

Oh my, I love this read with your beautiful accent because it makes that cat food made with real chicken sound like the most delectable treat! Great read – super energy and pace. Just double check the syllabic stress on “canary”, but that’s an easy fix!

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