Brian Evans
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Really nice work! I like how it’s in the first person until “Revlon.” Maybe there could be a shift in tone at that point? Not sure if that would be good or not for your reel.
Hi Earthbul! I really like the tone of your voice for this material. There is enough informal speech to convey the message and still plenty of details to make everything clear. Just a couple technical notes: The sound level comes in and out at the very beginning and at the end–“So you want…” sounds like it’s fading in and “…radical thinkers.” sounds like it’s fading out; and the music comes in a bit quiet for my ear and there isn’t a shift in your read (and/or a slight pause) when it starts so I wasn’t sure if it was intentional. But again, you’re voice is spot on for this.
Hi! For the AMC intro, I like the confident and informative beginning. It seems like it could pick up the pace and enthusiasm at “Movie fans can’t get enough…”. The new idea might be more enticing with an energy shift at that point. I also feel that the last few thoughts are a bit broken up. Maybe keeping the thoughts moving forward to the next idea would work.
For the Empire of Dreams documentary text, I also felt that you had a good tone of authority on the subject. One pattern that I noticed is the downward inflections at the ends of sentences. I think it works well when you sustain momentum between thoughts, as with “…small group from Cuba” into “then a larger one from Mexico.” Nice work!
Hi Emily. I really like the positive and enthusiastic read. Your confidence with the material makes me feel like I can learn to read music! I think “accompanying” could be more articulated. Maybe the “R” in “Reading” at the very top is drawn out a bit more than it needs to be?
I used a closet for a bit and moved on to a space with sound panels. That has been more comfortable. But the sound as compared to your last recording is MUCH better. Well done!
