Amitofu
Forum Replies Created
-
Replies
-
Kudos to both performances!
The Pier 1 ad is super-intimidatingly long. You did a great job and I don’t envy you haha. It might take a few more runs than it’s worth, but if I were you I’d try jam packing as quickly as you can through it, a bit to the point of absurdity. Then when you slow it back down a bit, you can navigate it real quick. I just imagine that if this were say a radio ad, you might have to stuff the entire ad into a tiny timeslot. proportionally this one is tough. Not saying you did anything wrong, just a ‘variation’ I’d have up my sleeve if this is a situation you think you might find yourself in later
kind regards,
AlexIn my opinion, this is one of the few exception in voice over where you have to take a VERY accusative tone to the listener. It’s definitely a mood shift; needs to be high energy and short bursts. Each punctuation should be like a solid right hook, haha.
Here’s a scene from Ali : Muhamad Ali responding to the Vietnam war – https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_XwYh8FZzdQ
same kinda energy needs to flow.Thanks so much. I definitely appreciate you going into detail and I’m glad you found my feedback helpful as well. The second voice was essentially a character voice. I’ve never really practiced an authentic British accent; ‘maybe’ in the distant future I’ll attempt one but this wasn’t meant to be an example, haha.
Thanks again.
Overall I don’t have any fundamental criticisms or flaws to point out. You did great.
In terms of pacing, I would of read the first sentence a little more quickly. It’s a brief instructional script though so it’s pretty subjective. The other thing I picked up on was “Find the seam of the carton, and peel away.” – I personally would shorten the gap between “carton” and “and” so that it’s one swift sentence (because the real final direction is in the next sentence “Press together slightly”)
Other than that, I’m not sure the volume is at the correct level. Sounds a little soft by comparison to the other’s on this page. (could be on my end though)
-Alex
Overall you’ve got a good voice. I’d say acting wise, maybe it sounded like you were too focused on something technical (eg; accent or script) that it lacked presence. I didn’t feel like I was being asked any of the question with a real sense of wonderment. Psychologically, rather your question is rhetorical or a direct question to the listener, the read needs to evoke imagery or creativity. a certain vibe of ponderment – eg: “Would you find new dreams or create wonders?” ‘new dreams’ and ‘create wonders’ can either be read like synonyms or they can be read against/versus each other; but either way the selling point is that the sky is the limit (so to speak).
Your read was good, but not nessicarily great. Keep at it though.
Your voice is great. I don’t think you should count yourself out of any documentary style based on your submissions. For whatever reason during the first read, I was thinking that it could easily be a nature/nat geo documentary on artic animals, maybe like penguins. It would be a a change of pace from the morgan freeman/pierce brosnan reads, but I found that kinda refreshing.
I will say that on the women’s health one, somewhere between the pauses and enthusiasm, I got more of a sales vibe than an informative one. (viz: “so it thinks you’re already pregnant”, reminds me of Clearasil commercials, haha)
Other than that, maybe try experimenting with a de-esser. some of them came off a little harsh.
Your voice is great! Overall Fantastic.
If you were really trying to press the criticism out of me, theres a couple of (mouth?) clicks from 0:06 to 0:09. I think like 3, but they’re pretty subtle so that’s just nitpicking. ((on second listen, that might be part of the bg music)) Other than that, the bg music selection was impressive but a little mismatched. The creepy crawly music leading up to the dramatic action style was really stellar, but then the funky music at the end kinda feels out of place. Ofc if it’s just for practice then don’t worry (maybe a demo or paid ad, consider consulting a pro); but if it is just for practice, I would warn against adding music and try to let your voice speak for itself (pardon the pun), at least for Voice-over forums. That way it’s easier to pick out smaller issues.
Like I said, I’m impressed.
Cheers!
yeah, I’d say Robert said what I was going to. I think maybe in trying to sound authentic you pulled so far away from an announcer style that (ironically) it was a bit script like and stilted.
eg; “…carpets were on sale through Saturday”
I did not feel like you went to Sears on Saturday. Not even one bit, haha, sorry.Outside of that, there’s a high pitch beep tone consistently in the background I thought you should be aware of.
I did like that you were ambitious enough to do a casual read, as opposed to a high energy sales pitch. With consistent practice and awareness, over time I think you’ll nail it.
I really like both of them! maybe the second a smidge better. Great job.
On the technical side, it sounds like you have a noise gate that is cutting a little too close to your words, kinda noticable fade away at the end of a couple phrases. Also, I don’t know if you’re using an EQ but perhaps look into something called demudding (I think. I’m not super-savvy). It sounds a little muffled.
