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Hi Wes@1972,
You’ve got a great sound, and love what you did with those three words at the beginning. From there, I didn’t get a good sense of who you were talking to. Try to map out this copy’s beginning, middle, and end. You’ve already got the beginning!-Alex
Hi all! Looking for feedback on performance as well as overall sound quality (my first attempt at using my DAW to make a better recording). Thanks!
Fitbit Sense “Transform Your Health”
Smart tech is everywhere: smart fridge, smart car, smart doorbell. But FitBit makes you smart about your health. It’s more than a smartwatch; it’s a smarter way to transform your health.Hi Tim! Nice sound, but I think you’re either too close to the mic or your gain is set too high. You’ve got a nice, relaxing tone, but it’s starting to border on monotone; try spicing it up and varying tempo, volume, or pitch. Find the story within this commercial and really tell it!
Hi there! Looking for feedback on performance (the shorter ones are always the trickiest). Thanks!
Audio-Technica “Rediscover Silence”
Rediscover Silence with the QuietPoint Noise-Cancelling headphones by Audio-Technica.Hi there! Looking for feedback on performance. Thanks so much!
Gillette “Shields and Cools as You Shave”
First, there’s shaving: blades, sharp and precise. Then Gillette shielding: comfy lubrication before and after. And also, cooling. Oooh, I got goosebumps. Proshield Chill from Gillette, the best a man can get.Hi all!
Looking for feedback on performance only. I’m specifically working to make this more conversational and natural. Any and all advice is appreciated! Thanks!
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Hi all!
Looking for feedback on performance only. I’m specifically working to make this more conversational and natural. Any and all advice is appreciated! Thanks!
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Love the throwback to Game Boy Advanced! Your tone is great for this, but I think you can capture more of the fun elements in this copy (tongue-biting, wider screen, etc.). Think of the images/sounds that will match this commercial: are they relaxed or action-packed? Nice work!
I love your smooth delivery for this cruise spot! You’ve captured the relaxing vibe really well. However, I wonder if you can add a little more urgency/excitement into the mix? There are moments that you’re so smooth I start to zone out. Otherwise, you’ve done a nice job with this!
