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Hello rcampos: Great job capturing the playful sarcasm of Carl – perfect! You have a wonderfully smooth voice and calming tone. My suggestion for this read is to pick up the energy to reflect the enthusiasm and eagerness these late-teens must be feeling at (perhaps) their first shot at independence and adulthood.

I noted additional breaths after “dreams” “rules” “conduct” “Carl” and “but” which interrupted the flow. Obviously you have to breath, but perhaps assign where is the most efficient and natural spot to do so so that you keep it moving.

The music I would change or lose; it sets a mood for me that doesn’t encapsulate the youthful energy this time of life epitomizes.

You c l e a r l y have the skills and the voice so take my comments with a grain of salt.