Treva Dean
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These sound great! I’d say the Seinfeld sounded a bit rushed, like maybe it was the first one you recorded and you were nervous about it, but not so much that didn’t still flow well. In the Amelia Earhart one, the inflection on “pioneering pilot” just sounded a little flat compared to the lovely lilt the rest of the sample had. Overall, though, seriously good work!
This is a solid read! I agree with what Brian said above about the pauses, and I’d add that it could use a little more “excitement”. The direction notes say they want a “charismatic” read that will get people to watch the next video, so a little more energy wouldn’t be amiss here. Well done!
Good reads! For the Chobani one, there’s a pause right after “rule” that disrupts the flow. There’s also an emphasis on the word “be”, when it seems like emphasis on “couldn’t” or “delicious” would make more sense given the text. You’re doing great!
Hi all! I have a second one that I could use feedback on. Again, working on my conversational tone, but any and all feedback is helpful!
Your pacing was good! There were a couple moments where there were odd pauses, though. You paused after “the role of accounting in business” and “the economic performance”, and the pauses interrupted the flow of your words. Maybe focus on keeping the pauses as natural as possible.
I agree about maybe adding a smile to your read, to pep it up a little. I also think it would be good to focus on which words *need* to be emphasized. At one point you were saying you’d tell the listener to pause so they could walk to an area, and the word “walk” was emphasized. My coach has been on me about this, so that’s probably why it stood out, lol.
