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Hi svenbot. Only thing I would add to Mary’s comment is to edit out the breath sound at 0:08. Quite good! Toque

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Hi Amitofu. The only thing I would add to the feedback already provided is that it felt like the second read for both was more natural to you and your voice. The second, lower reads felt less natural. Great work! Toque.

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Hi Mary. I agree with the other feedback – good overall; still need to add some energy so that I believe you are super into this beer! Also re: the comments about more variation in the list. I felt the pause right before the list may have been a tad too long as well. Keep up the great work! Toque.

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Sounds good to me Katelyn. Clean, well enunciated, good pace. Well done!Toque

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Happy New Year all! Good to be back at it. I’ll be testing out and practising some possible scripts for my commercial demo reel here. Below is the first. I appreciate all feedback (script, performance, suitability for my voice, sound quality, etc.) Thanks in advance!

Toque

Script:

Bundle your family up and join us on the hill! Fresh powder, challenging elevations, breathtaking views and
friendly staff are waiting for you at Sir Sam’s Ski & Ride, in Haliburton.

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It’s a good read Mary! You definitely sound authentic to me. I have one comment I’d like to put out there for you and others that is not so much about your read as it is about commercial reads in general and how to approach them. I keep hearing that “conversational”, “person next door” reads are the way to go. But I listened to a number of actual commercials yesterday on the ispottv website, and noticed that, to me anyway, there appear to be a number that really don’t sound all that “conversational”. Car commercials especially stood out, but there were others, like a “scrubbing bubbles” toilet cleaner commercial, that sounds very “charactery” (sorry if that’s not a great descriptive). So it just leaves me struggling a bit as to when we should be going “natural”, versus maybe a bit charactery/over-the-top? I guess it all depends on what the piece’s/client’s direction is? Would love to hear what others think. T

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I think it sounds great Katelyn, well done! T

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I think Mary’s comments nailed it. Great job! T

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Thanks Alex! T

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Hi Erik. I liked it as well. Great voice, tone, pacing, etc. The only, very minor thing that stood out to me a bit was that, to my ear, the word “creativity” felt the tiniest bit over-enunciated. I know finding that balance, between good enunciation and sounding natural/conversational, can be a tough one. Overall, great read! Toque

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