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ParticipantHi Mary. I would just echo Svenbot’s comments. I think your reading would benefit from being more conversational, like you were just chatting casually with your best friend and telling them about your X-terra. Hope this helps. Toque
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ParticipantHi all! Another practise read below, for a PSA re: Drinking & Driving, from the Edge Library. Comments on any and all aspects are very much appreciated. Toque
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As an emergency room surgeon, I’ve seen things most people never will. I have had to harden myself … so I can do my job.
But when I see another family ripped apart…because of a d***k driver…that really breaks my heart.
If you could see the damage done on a daily basis, like I do…You’d never drink and drive again.Attachments:
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ParticipantThanks Brian, I’ve learned something new! Toque
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ParticipantAgain Brian, great work! You’ve got some good variety in there. I numbered your voices from 1 – 10 in the order they appear on your reel. The only areas I thought there may be some similarity between voices were:
Voices # 2 and #3 (0:11 – 0:35), to my ear anyway, sounded quite similar, with # 3 just being louder.
Voices # 1 (0:00 – 0:11) and #5 (0:52 – 1:06 – “sorry I ate the landlord”) sounded similar to me.
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ParticipantSounds great to me Brian! Feels like you’ve got the style and pace right. Audio is good and clear. I did notice 3 or 4 breath sounds along the way, but I’m still quite new to all this and haven’t had any coaching or practise on documentary style reads, so maybe a few breath sounds are acceptable in the longer documentary style reads? Either way, great job! Toque
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ParticipantHi Mary. The second read is definitely the better one (no background static, and good volume). Toque
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ParticipantHi svenbot. On tone and pace, I think you’re great! One thing I did note was that i feel like I’m hearing some echo in the recording. Maybe a sound treatment issue in your recording space? Otherwise, very well done! Toque
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ParticipantGreat job Katelyn! Very bright, clear read, nice pace. Makes me want to listen and learn. If I had any feedback for improvement, it would be that once or twice your “to” sounded like “ta”. I’ve done it myself many times. I try to avoid it by writing the word on my script as “2” rather than “to”. (Same thing with “4” instead of “for”). Excellent work! Toque
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ParticipantBoth reads are great Rogue! If I had to choose between the two, I’d say the second one is my favourite. Great job! Toque
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ParticipantHi Katelyn. To me, the second read feels truer to what you intended (subdued, luxurious), so I liked that one better. To really distinguish between the 2 reads, i may have gone with even more energy/upbeat for the first read. Great work though! Toque
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