tomnunes
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Loving the rich baritone, docr15. Some comments: Lost the ‘t’ in ‘most’ and ‘costs’, sounding like ‘mose’ and ‘cose’. As with my comment in Butterball, not sure why the emphasis on the word ‘you’. I feel “…coverage you need” and “for a price you can afford” should be more attached. The latter seems like a second thought. Otherwise, you’re doing great. I’m sure your demo will be super. Good luck!
Another nice read. Some comments. The choice to emphasize ‘you’ in “Butterball brings YOU the joys of Turkey day” feels odd. I feel like you can play more with the unexpected twist of what seems to be a traditional holiday message turning to the cool novelty of grilling in the summer. A bit more amazement on “surprisingly juicy”, as if you were surprised yourself. Basically, a little more of a “wink” to the listener. The voice is great. Like butter. 🙂 Just have more fun with the text.
Great voice. I like the down home welcoming sound. The vibe is right, but the energy doesn’t yet match the Popeye’s brand. (Unless you and your coach are working on a more laid back sound.) ‘Come along’ was hard for me to understand. Some mouth noise on New Orleans and elsewhere but otherwise the sound quality was good.
